I thought it was very similar in style to Catching Fire :P

Omg. This was amazing, depressing, but wow.
I honestly cried at the end, what you've written loved me so much, I just can't help not cry for them.
Tori, was always a grey kind of character. She never did anything explicitly wrong nor did she stop anything either. She's complicated but that's what I liked about her.
She didn't need to be a hero, but now she's all alone. Lukes gone. Heart-breaking that's what it is.

Almost cried at the end but I held back.

I've cried like twenty times while reading this book. Sometimes, I feel like Tori should also stop feeling selfish and just kill herself so Luke can leave and the war would be finished before it even started.

LUKE YOU LIAR! IM HEARTBROKEN! OMG NOOOOOO

I love them so much I almost want to cry.

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

I'm literally hyperventilating. Holy moly. I have been reading this story pretty much since the start and wow. Just wow. This is probably one of the most well-written stories I've ever read (if not, the best). I will barely be able to wait for the next installment in Tori's story. I'm actually really curious to see how it'll turn out without Luke around (but who knows maybe he make a return? *wink wink*). My feelings for this story are just too extreme to explain in words! Thank you so much for allowing me to take this journey along with Tori. I'll be looking forward to receiving the email that lets me know Tori's returned!

I love this story and I'll wait until I turn sixteen for the sequel if I have to! (I'm 13)

Hi! This is Anon31 here; I've finally gotten around to logging in after a long process of trying to dig out my password.

I have to say, I think I'm a masochist. I actually read Chapter 43 exactly 14 minutes after you posted it. Admittedly, before that, I was updating the page hourly because I was so on edge after Chapter 42 ... and I might have reread that painful scene over a couple dozen times. Truly, while I don't think it was the healthiest thing I've ever done on a mental note, it never failed to leave me in tears. So, I assure you, your hard work payed off in retrospect.

Now, on that note: The actual review. This will be a long one, I'm warning you.

Can I say "wow"? Because, WOW. Wow. It's almost unbelievable that this story is concluded - or, at least, this part of it. It's been a sweet, painful, angsty, lovely, and beautiful read. Truly well-done and well-woven.

There's something I should cover more in-depth: The complexity of this story and how it's told through Tori's eyes. From the start, we know that it won't have a happy ending; the title says it, the summary reads it, and the whole premise essentially bleeds it. It's something that's supposed to be painful and sweet from the very beginning. And I don't think that this is appreciated quite enough; like I said before, I honestly believe this story deserves to have the 1k status, even if it's not a genuine measure of quality - it just doesn't get enough recognition.

Tori is not a hero. She's not self-sacrificial in the way that Percy Jackson is, and she isn't a particularly destined one inclined to help save the world. Yet, everything that she does wrong can't even be clearly defined as "wrong," because her motives are in such a grey region. In the eyes of the reader, the deaths that her actions have led to are almost negligible, because they would have happened anyways. In PJO, they could be blamed on Percy or mere bad luck; casualties, at worst. Yet, with the existence of Tori, who has made all the "wrong choices" in place of everything, she suddenly becomes available as a scapegoat and a funnel for all the negativity. For her, this could be blamed on love or bad hindsight; but it runs further than that. She knows exactly what she's doing, what she's thinking, and the big picture of it all - and she realizes that she can't save everyone, despite blaming it on herself. So she has to choose, and hold the burden of her choices regardless. What I'm saying, is that you have written an excellent OC for a tragic love tale that could have easily gone too far. You balanced her perfectly.

In all honesty, I love Tori and her dynamic with other characters. I love how she still recognizes her responsibilities, and doesn't shirk away from what her actions have entailed. The surprise Zeus showed towards her silence - that's the grit that she inevitably shows in light of having been left alone. And she really does shine.

Now, with the final chapter, you have portrayed the numbness and pain wonderfully (not exactly a sentence I've ever imagined using, in all honesty - but you deserve it). There's a quality running throughout it, that could be described as helplessness. It has a very fine air of finality after a battle; and Tori's acceptance of how things will continue on without Luke. It's very easy to envision everything that could have gone right, and it felt like there was a reminder of what could've been at any given point in the chapter - an execution instead of living, the ring given by Luke instead of Hermes; even the whole premise being a bad dream. Yet, the end is abstract and solid all at the same time: Tori must go on no matter what.

The final chapter isn't happy or sad, I agree. It's very open and very much "life must go on," and that's actually worse, because there's something tragic about that.

There's a lot of things I could go on about, but it's almost too much for me to go on. This story is truly almost too heartwrenching at some points to think about, so I congratulate you on that. One thing that I was left somewhat curious about afterwards, though, was how Percy, Annabeth, Grover, and them acted towards Tori after Olympus.

But, I digress. It's been a fantastic story you've spun here. It's the Perfect Story, you could say! (Heh.)
I'll be keeping an eye out for the sequel, no doubts. I'm looking forward to seeing how you'll connect this with HOO; and I hope that, despite all else, Tori might be able to reach a ... semi-happy ending, at the very least?

Regardless, thank you for all your hard work.
Cheers!

-Anon31/zerosbooblights

I've never read such a wonderful story...I cried more than once...I luv it! Plz hurry to finish this...

Hey, you're back!

I'm glad to hear that you had a great time in China; it sounds like it was an awesome experience!

I'd like to start things off by saying that I am hopelessly crying in big, fat, and ugly tears. This chapter - Luke's death, and especially with Tori's response immediately after - was both parts horrible and spectacular. I actually don't know if I want to read the final chapter once it comes out or not ... I'm not sure if I can handle the heartwrenching pain of it all.

I can certainly say the past couple of chapters was an especially good ride. The changing dynamics, Tori and her brother's interaction, Annabeth's demeanour towards Tori ... it's sad to see that all this occurs during a war, and how it affects people. But it's all and equal parts heartwarming, too.

The story's ending may or may not be happy, but I can already say that it is, indeed, showing to be the "perfect" conclusion. I can't wait until the next chapter; thank you for your hard work!

Please excuse me as I go grab a tissue box and cry in a corner now.

-Anon31

I loved this story sooo much . I cried when reading this and I had to read it twice . Make sure you update today , are you gonna do an epilogue or was that the end ? Anyway loved it you are a good writer , keep on writing

Yay I loved this chapter and the entire story! ️

Holy crap I wasn't expecting tori to become so badass! I've been waiting patiently (or perhaps not so patiently) for you to come back and I couldn't be happier. Can't wait for the next chapter!