I love the dedication descript. Best one yet lol

Oh my gosh, this is the BEST STORY! Amazing job!
Are you still considering doing a sequel? Please tell me you are!

OH MY GOOSE! I THINK YOURE THE BEST AUTHOR I’VE READ FROM WOAHH I LOVE YOU

That’s really cute.

O. That was intense.

There’s some beautiful bonding moments here, and I love Tadashi’s solution to letting Hiro move around without actually moving.

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I liked. I especially like you just asking for an X or an O, that’s a really simple idea that makes it easy for reviewers.

I kept on wincing when Hiro described his asthma and mentally urging him to do things that make me feel better when I have asthma. When I was little I suffered from frequent and harsh asthma attacks which landed me in the ER more times than I care to count for more than 3 hours most of the time. Mostly because I was too stubborn to go to the ER until absolutely necessary so I can relate to Hiro not wanting his family to find out. Sometimes it got bad enough that I threw up during a coughing fit. The whole house was up when I had asthma. I tried to make nobody notice though so I would go through the motions of taking care of it myself. 1. I sat up straight and slept against a wall or a chair or a couch so breathing was easier (it's hard to do but when you get used to it, it is really useful when trying to sleep in vehicles) 2. I used multiple inhalers at different intervals (there are many different kings depending on your prescription, currently I have two one is blue and used during asthma attacks and on cold days or before excersize, the other is for daily use twice a day) 3. I drank water or hot tea, it actually helps clear my throat a bit 4. I played games on my phone to keep me calm and regulate my breathing (a machine such as Hiro is using usually makes noise, the one with the mask, so it was an absolute last resort for me)
Most of my asthma attacks happened at night so I was often sluggish during the day, sleep deprivation is expected. I went to the hospital for a bit in 3rd grade and stopped having it until a few months ago when I had my relapse and refused to go to the ER for 8 hours before my breathing levels dropped below 60 (average is 100) so I gave in. It took about 5 hours of constant medication to make it stop. So yeah asthma sucks and I hate hospitals and have a fear of needles now from having to try so much medication. You described it pretty well and I can really relate to his situation. Poor guy.
All in all, good job!

Loving it so far! Lmao i thought DOA meant dead on arrival... guess im watching too many Friends episodes

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