I love your backstories. Thank you for writing!

Hmm... It's hard to articulate why I like this so much, it has an...organic feel, that a lot of things like it don't have. There's a lot of fantastic touches, like Tseng's card being completely blank, Corneo feels like Corneo (with a bit of grit added that fits the universe but makes him seem more real), and his power structure has just that extra level of complication that most people wouldn't bother to put in. Everything about this feels like it could be real, but there are elements of gameworld that work well here.

I'm sold that he wants to get out of the wall market game, but less that the Turks are appealing- isn't that just being used in the same way on a bigger scale? Nothing in Tseng's sales pitch about freedom or an exit clause after a certain amount of service, just money, travel, and a snazzy suit.