I'm familiar with the whole Jillia-Queen spoof rumor (the man who made it up admitted it was a joke), and while the idea never sat right in my mind, this is a very interesting fic. I was really intrigued by your idea that Jillia, because of the Beast Rune, could become as dangerous as Luca. There are a few problems though -Jillia was taken to Harmonia at the end of SII, so she wouldn't be near the Rune, so it wouldn't be such a threat, maybe. Also, there's no mention of Jowy. His experience with his half of a True Rune undoubtedly made an impact on his wife's life. I guess I also can't see either Jillia or Queen abandoning Pilika, especially when she's about to hit her teen years.

Anyway, enough of that. You have a great writing style, and I'd love to see more of this (I hardly see any good SFDF fanfics). No way should Queen's story END when it's just beginning. This could be very interesting, especially if you had stuff during the Higheast rebellion (which Geddoe, ergo, Queen, was part of) where Highland tried to regain the throne. You could have Queen encounter the Beast Rune head-on...

This makes sense, and is very well told. Great job! Like other reviewers, I'm not sure how well it fits into the actual canon, but it's a fascinating idea.

wow that was actually really good. i never thought of jillian like that 0.o _

I agree with some of the previous reviewers - I like the idea of Queen Jillia (I don't think she canonically is; she appears to be from Sanady/Sanadier, the same as Zaj in Suikogaiden - which would also be an interesting angle for a fic, if they were related...), and this is a good start and well-written, but it moves a little too fast. That may /be/ your intention, that perhaps the transformation from Jillia into Queen could only happen abruptly; but if not, it would due with some fleshing out... or, if she becomes hardened over time, show us what happens in the Border Defense Force to /make/ her that way. Trained or not, Jillia hasn't really seen the "horrors of war" firsthand (murder and treachery, sure, but I don't think she was ever up close and personal with a battlefield), so there's probably a lot of room for exploration there.

In other words, WRIT MORE PLZ THIS FIC SO KEWLZ! U R TEH BEST! :)

As a Queen fan, I think it's a great idea. I also think you've got a good hand for character sketches-but I do hope that this is an introduction to a longer story.

I honestly never would've thought of JilliaQueen. After reading this, I saw mention of it here and there elsewhere-I think it's fairly likely. Even if not, it makes for a good story.

Someone else mentioned that this was too short; I think that with flashbacks or memories in future chapters, you can expand it without having to write a larger introduction. Of course, that's just me trying to wheedle you into writing more. )

Well done!

Interesting.

Of course, if you continue this, you may want to consider mentioning her relationship with Watari.

Watari, if I recall, was in trouble with the Kage Ninja Clan because he remained loyal to "that woman" of the Blight family. Which could either be Pilika or Jillia. (Yes, they changed names, but Ninjas have mad skillz.)

The idea's rather interesting... But this chapter seems to go entirely too fast. It would have to take a long time for Jillia to change into someone like Queen, but with this, it feels like it only took a month or two. Such a drastic change would have to be gradual and realistic, it could take her several years to become someone new.

Maybe you could elaborate her reasoning as well. Is there a specific reason or event that would make her want to be tougher and independant?

-How easy it would be to just grab the sword and hold it to her breast, savour the tang of metal and thick crimson blood and slaughter everyone like the animals they were pigs really become the devil incarnate laugh at the pile of corpses and laugh at the whole world what has it ever done for you remember who you are you are a Blight and you belong to me-

I think you know that this is a very bad run-on sentence. It makes no sense.

Overall, the idea's not bad, but you could flesh out the introduction a lot more.

Nice. I've liked toying with the idea of Queen being Jillia. Ever since Queen said something about her country being gone now, I've wondered about her.