This story is relatively old, so I imagine that most of my critiques have either lost their point as you age linguistically or because there was a specific type of tone you were going for. That being said, I think this had incredible potential! The plot was genius, for sure, and what really saved it for me was the flashbacks. Lydia's time away definitely needed to be fleshed out, and so while the flashbacks/nightmares tided us over, I think you could've really delved into the grit of that story and done something great with it. And while the plot was great, there was also a lot of showing rather than telling. The descriptions were very caustic at points and pretty swift in terms of pace; I think that's definitely something that comes with maturity though. Overall, I really enjoyed the Malia/Lydia friendship and the slow path towards Stydia. The emotions of the characters felt really true to the situation and I think you got the gravity of their connection just right! Great work!

It's over! ahhh what a way to end, seriously all is good and happy :) I love it when people expand Lydia's talents in their fics because she is brilliant and the show doesn't do her justice x the malia and lydia friendship was so well done in this entire fic and it is something I actually really loved x and of course the Stydia (especially this chapter) was amazing xx thanks so much for the fanfic and well done xx

And... somehow I'm picturing screaming man from Van Gogh painting :O

It's finally end. Yey. Such a plot. Great one! :)
Definitely put into my favorite list

Fuck your story stalia for life

Yeah see this is what I wanted to see in season 4. Stiles and the pack actually mourning Allison and Stiles feeling guilty and blaming himself and Lydia feeling guilty and blaming herself. It's way more realistic when it's written this way . I am so glad you had Lydia figure out what to do with her banshee powers, it's always awesome to see how cool she actually is. Thanks for the update xx good cliffhanger xx

I guess you are not going to give them fluffy and smut
I can't wait for everything unfold.
I mean Kate might be psycho and all but blaming Stiles is another thing.

I love the way you put closure between Malia, Stiles and Lydia although picturing Malia with Scott makes me shudder.
Malia is a bit OOC with all secretive about her feeling towards Scott but I guess with all going on between them, it's going to be awkward.

Can't wait and maybe you should turn stiles into a werewolf if he is close to dying

Ugh Stiles you damn idiot why are you doing this to your pack. It is just like him though, so good job at keeping him in character x I loved the stydia at the end, it was so cute and lovely x thanks for the update :)

I am dying from all the cuteness and Stydia in this chapter, seriously it is so adorable. This is probably my favourite chapter now and I really loved the little end bit where Stiles was kissing her scars because god it was so heartwarming xx thanks for the update and merry christmas xx

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Oh wow this was so well thought out and written. I know that Stiles will be supportive, as will the rest of them. I'm glad that she discussed it with Malia, she is the only one who would understand and it strengthened their relationship which is so great. Loved the Stydia and the chapter xxx

awwww this started out so heart breaking but then became sweet and happy and I'mglad she is finally back. I really hope they did let her go and aren't going to make her go back and violate the contract or kate shows up again and ruins everything.

I shouldn't have read this during class I was legit like "awww" out loud and then had to quickly make something up. But really aw this was adorable and such a different pace from the rest of the story, like it's nice to take a break from the sad angst-y stuff :) It's really good to see that there was no "we both love each other but we're in denial" sort of thing because it is exhausting reading that. Well done, great job xx

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