Proofread and a beta would really help this story grammatically, but it’s dead.

Also...my god I dunno if you wanted to make his family funny but they’re frankly the most obnoxious characters I’ve ever seen. From how they’re written to how they behave. I’m a big brother of four and if I ever acted like ANY of these guys, I’d throw myself off a bridge.

*whispers* Can’t have them overprotective of him one minute, to the point they can’t even let him get a girlfriend, then socially assasinate him by sending something personal to all his friends that can end with him being alienated. That’s called ‘emotional abuse’.

You made Jaune Arc into something that TVtropers call the ‘Designated Monkey’ or ‘Woobie’. At least Neo is somewhat funny.

Dunno why people recommended this story to me.

seriously?

MMMMOOOOORRREEEEE please

Are you dead?

This is a good story. Shame it seems to be dead.

That was a nice reverse of Ozpin's talk with Ruby.

It's a good idea and story, but I've really got a gripe with how Jaune's family treats him. It's like he's a complete whipping boy and total bitch and no matter what he does it's useless. I think there's a fine line between 'Picking on Siblings' and 'Total Cruelty.' His sisters are pretty mean to mean to him and eventually he's going to snap. A person can only take so much before completely losing it.

Also they should know that the more they try to coddle him the more they'll end up pushing him away. Jaune's got to sink or swim on his own or he'll always remain the way he is. Honestly I hope he does snap if you decide to continue the story. That would be completely awesome and well justified. Maybe then they'll see what horrid bitches they were to him.

Sorry for the rant, but complete humiliation and cruelty is something I really can't stand. Other than that, good story.

That speech far outclassed Ozpin's original.

Really enjoyed this story, 2 bad you are dead or something...

It's nice a pity you seem to have retired from this

so unimportant but, jealous vs envious... loved this, please continue, i really like how your writing all the characters. Keep up the good work!

I love it. Do more. If this ends up with the Schnee sisters fighting over Jaune, kudos to you. Get the Yellow/Red siblings on it too, good job. Please add Pyrrha. Definitely add Pyrrha. But it's all up to you if we have an absolute Neo romance here. I'm dying to hear her talk though.

Hope you continue this one day

This is pretty hilarious :)

Really liked the chapter, happy to have updates on this.

Missed you. ;-;