I loved the plot twists... Please continue the story... You are an amazing writer!

the detail are confusing

Wtf are these nicknames? Did a 7 year old name them?

Are you gonna at least try to make this realistic? Cuz this chapter was horrible

Story is pretty good so far, but the giant blocks of text are distracting. Separate dialogue and break up "action sequences" into smaller parts; each character's dialogue should be separated from the rest, so a reader can be sure who's talking.

I meant fucking dickwads

And I'd just like to add, if you have the balls to hate on a good story then I'd like to see YOU write one and see how bad it feels to have YOUR story hated on you fuck dickwads. #1 Delphox lover out

Bro I love this story so far, and to all the cock sucking haters, go do what you do best, oh wait that's right your so stupid you don't know a good story when your fucking reading it, so I'll just say it, go suck some fucking dick before getting it shoved up your ass you anal and oral lovers, this is a great story and it has no grammar problems or spelling mistakes compared to other stories I've read, and I've read a LOT. #1 Delphox lover out

You're an idiot and this crap stain needs to stay dead.

Thanks

I can't take it anymore so I'll stop reading here. The writing is horrible, the characters' motives are never explained and they're not developed at all, the battles are short and boring. There's no excitement during battle scenes. The story feels like I'm reading a summary instead of the real thing. I thought a battlefic like this would be exciting but I find myself not at all invested in what happens. Ash was gonna punch someone in the face just because they joined the tournament and he didn't think he could defeat them? Pathetic.
I really liked what you did in allowing others to come up with OC trainers for you. Very unique and interesting. Their addition made Ash feel like more of a side character instead of the main however. You should consider not injecting authors notes every 3 paragraphs though. Unnecesairy and very distracting. Thanks for the effort you put into this though. Keep practising your writing!

What the heck? How did they go from hating on Ash to murdering him and his mum in just a few lines? It's ridiculous... Still, I'm gonna keep reading and see what happens.

urgh your formatting is bloody awful. try to make paragraphs a bit clearer, otherwise it's annoying to read

Genial

Fuck me... Who the hell is the damn protagonist in this story. You need to make your story clearer and structure them better...