"At that moment, when they hadn't let him kill the blonde, he knew that he would never win if she had been conscious."

WHAT ?!

Vegeta would never win if #18 was conscious ?!

Are you aware that this is not the same Vegeta who got defeated by #18 ?!

Are you aware that this is Vegeta after training for 2 YEARS in the HTC ?!

Are you aware that this Vegeta can easily destroy Semi-Perfect Cell, and Semi-Perfect Cell can destroy #18 in a single attack ?!

(As canonical proof: Semi-Perfect Cell destroyed approximately 1/3rd of Android #16's head in just one attack, and Android #16 was stronger than both #17 and #18)

This Vegeta would totally and utterly DESTROY both #17 and #18 without breaking a single twinkle of sweat !

Case closed.

Why not? Some parts are a bit confusing, but the storyline seems interesting enough. Plus, big kudos to you for keeping the characters as they are in the show, personality-wise.

I'm curious to see what the plot will bring.

Yamcha is very out of character...

You didn't warn about the Yamcha bashing...

J'aime bien .

since when is this against rules? If it has been then noone has enforced it because people do this in literally every genre on this site when thry outgrow ff

It's nice to see your reasoning behind Vegeta. That sounds more like him.

I hope you get your groove and come back to this story. Keep it up

I can't wait

Interesting story idea good job!

Could you have Satan's Agent, Miss Piiza switch from fangirling Satan to Fangirling Gohan later, I think it'd be funny

I'm sorry to find out you're deleting most of your stories; I really love your work. But I understand and respect your reasons so I have no right to complain. Yeah, this is a short chapter but it's a good one too; you captured Vegeta's thoughts on the situation perfectly. Kudos. Can't wait to see what happens next. Please keep up the good work.

Hey there. I really like it so far. Please continue. I so want to know what will happen in the next chappi. There are too few, in which gohan has a tail. Love that lil ' detail keep posting

I love the idea for the story. I also like the pacing you have set for telling it so far. No need to rush, and skip story. Action is a dime a dozen in DBZ, but it is the plot in these stories that set them apart.

So I love the idea of a darker Gohan, but this isn't a darker Gohan. I don't know what this is. Gohan Broly now? And this came about how?

What caused this change? Why do we have psycho Gohan who can tap into the powers of the legendary Super Saiyan? That right there is the biggest issue with your story. There isn't a reason for the change.

Even though it is your own AU and you have the right to change what you please, you need logical reasons for those changes. Event A happened, and thus because of it Event C happened instead of Event B which is what would have happened if the story had stayed true to canon. Then because of event C, event D happens, and so forth. That is how these type of stories are written.

If you work on and explain that (it doesn't have to be fully, but you need to throw us something), then your story will improve drastically.

While I am on the topic of sudden changes that make no sense, what is up with Vegeta? Why is he so different? Nothing has happened in your story that makes Vegeta all of the sudden care about the humans of the planet. He does evolve over time into a good guy true, but the change doesn't happen this fast, and there is no story reason for it.

A flaw that many writers make is to put something in the story just because it sounds good or the think they need it in the plot without providing a foundation for that change.

To end on a positive note, I can't wait to see Chi-Chi's reaction to the new Gohan. I am not sure if she will want to kill Gohan for the change or Goku for putting her son in that situation in the first place.

Also, just a random thought I had as I was writing this review, Trunks needs to go back into the Future, free it and then he can come back to be with Gohan. He is allowing his timeline to suffer further for a situation he can't change.

I spent the time telling you these things, because I believe that this story has a chance to go places. It is a hell of an idea, one I wish I had thought of as I write Gohan stories myself. The darker Gohan part, not the Gohan with the powers of Broly, that is just weird without a detailed reason why.

Look forward to seeing what you come up with next, and especially learning why Gohan has the new powers that he has.

Just as a final thought, it occurs to me that if Gohan's power is going to always increase like some people believe Broly's does then he is going to have a really easy time with Buu in seven years (if you go in that direction), especially when you throw in his SSJ2 form.

Sorry to tell you that, but to recitate the words of an earlier reviewer, Vegetas so called "reasoning" is the greatest bunch of hypocritical garbage I have ever heard.
The rest of the human population? the only one who has actually killed someone during their confrontation with 17 and 18 was Vegeta himself, not to mention that he refused to kill Cell than he had the chance and purposely let him become complete.
All that 17 and 18 did was stealing a car, driving around and beat up a few people who challenged them, the one who killed people and willingly endangered the world was Vegeta.
That he now uses the safety of humanity as an excuse to attack 18 once again is beyond absurd and that none of the other Z-fighters throws this right into his face makes them equally big hypocrites.
And no, 18 has not really "changed", in opposite to certain Z-fighters she had not been killing people for sport or tried to blow up the planet in the first place.
Despite my problem with this situation, the story as a whole is well written and interesting.

Awesome chapter.