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I did not expect this...kids show to become...
nice storyline though

I think the big problem with this is that it seems like celestia is supposed to be the protagonist but her actions are truly despicable, it just makes it kinda hard to root for her, but at the same time Luna and Twilight seem like the stereotypical antagonists who have a morally sound end goal but use questionable tactics to achieve it making readers unsure who to side with and that just doesn't work with this plot line. I love the idea but it needs just a bit of work in the execution. My other problem is that you're constantly shifting from human to pony making it quite hard to follow so just a little more consistency in that aspect would really help.

Sooo are they human or horse?
"I cut your off your fingers and hooves"
"Twilight's hands grabbed celestia's mane as she fell"

oh my flip..this is scary.
i LOVE this...so much

that...that was deep but amazing

Wow

O...M...G...I love this story

Wow. I are a genius

This story is pretty good

I'm enjoying this story so far. And I look forward to see where your going with it.

Poor Celestia! I hope she can find a way to escape somehow!