IM ON THE EDGE OF MY SEAT RIGHT NOW. poor Jack, i hope they get through this

Tell me it's not Disney's Frozen all over again.

Well, Jack gave me whiplash. Also, I think part of the chapter might be missing?

Come on please don’t leave us hanging like that
I need to know what the list says

So cute! They have family! The feels! Great job!

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Yay! The long wait is fine! I mean, you're updating now, right? So it's great! :)

Now this makes sense. Now the plot point serves a purpose. Though, the drabbles are confusing. Don't get me wrong, I like them, but we seem to have different definitions. For me they're small one-shots. For you it's similar but it's also completely isolated from the story. Essentially, it's an AU within an AU. I thought they were just small character focused bits that served the overall story.
Anyway, I must compliment you on pulling this off so well. For starters for actually doing something about it. I've seen many stories that when people point things out, the author gets defensive and starts whining and doesn't do anything about the issue.
Second, very good, and more importantly, believable portrayal of Jack. Most writers who put some parts of PitchxElsa, in any form really, willing or forced, always have Jack just taking the discovery all peachy well and fine. Except Jack's human (even as a guardian/spirit he has human emotions), and what's worse, Pitch is his mortal enemy. There's no way in hell Jack would EVER take it even remotely well. And kudos for having him understandably and justifiably angry with Elsa.
Elsa could have avoided the drama by telling him but, yeah she wants to be cold and test him and it was only that last time that we were aware of what she did to Pitch. No one could say there weren't other times where she could have slept with him or been forced too. I'm not sure you know how many stories are out there that the author has Elsa blindly and STUPIDLY sleep with Pitch despite all the evidence that he's a complete asshole being so clear and obvious, even an eyeless cavefish could see it.
While Jack's portrayal was good overall when finally confronting Elsa, it was at its best towards the end when he was angry and sad and feeling betrayed as he told her about his mother and just how Elsa had hurt him when she kept the truth from him.
Well done; good job.

Wow I feel so bad for both of them right now! Great work, please keep it up!

Just so... beauiful.. please continue

Great work I love it! And Jack you almost messed up big time!

awwwwww...poor jack...he was really mad wasn't he?!

aw this is so cute! i can't believe he left her for that long though! if it were me, i would be so paranoid about not being back in time that i would check my watch and probably give myself a maximum time to be away! but that's just me, im totally paranoid!
that journal sounds amazing! i would love one!

That was really good! The conversation felt natural and the pacing also felt good from both sides. I have nothing more to add other than the fact I reallt liked it!

Waiting for next time!

I have a question about why you put something in the story. What the point of having Elsa sleep with Pitch? I mean it's disgusting a sure, but you have the line with Jack 'Abruptly, he stood leaving his crush in the bathroom alone.' which implies something, but then the next time they're already sort of flirting and by ch. 11 they're together. See, the problem is (ignoring the disgustingness of the situation) you have a false buildup/false start to nothing. It has the readers expect something, then completely throws it away. With Jack's reaction, I expected him to be disgusted by her (understandable, Elsa sleeping with Pitch is the equivalent of her having sex with a diseased pig or a cockroach, and neither a pig nor a cockroach is nearly as disgusting as Pitch), and for them to fight or something. For Jack to be angry that she gave in so easily to an abusive asshole and to avoid her. Instead, nothing happens at all. After feeling the murderous hatred for Pitch after finding that out, my reaction was 'that's it?' Because it didn't cause anything between Jack and Elsa, it might as well have not happened at all, otherwise what's the point of saying Elsa slept with Pitch, other than to maybe cause some readers to vomit? At the very least it's very anticlimatical.
Btw, it's kind of ironic that she's thinking about having balls now, when she didn't have any to rip off Pitch's nut sack (then again, he probably doesn't have any) and force feed it to him rather than sleep with the slimebag.
And a btw 2, if Pitch was able to get up and drive off, Jack didn't do NEARLY enough. He should have several broken bones punctured/collapsed organs and brain damage if Jack was really doing anything worthwhile; Pitch should have needed those robotic legs they give to paralysis patients before he could ever dream of getting out of there.