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Great story! I love the way this story is turning out with so much humor and heart-warming moments. I just have to say that Kelly is one of my favorite characters (especially in chapter 5 when she totally lost her temper for the doctors lack of better care for Samus since her wound was infected— I laughed so hard reading that easily my top moment in the story). I enjoy the mood she always brings to the table in all circumstances throughout the story: they’re so relatable! Another thing I love is the way you portrayed Chief and Samus’s unique fatherly/daughter connection that makes it so heartwarming and infectiously happy for the reader to witness (I loved the way Chief recognizes Samus as more than just a military asset in fact as his own family —which was so shocking and amazing—as well, when no one else acknowledged how they viewed her for her. In closing, I overall love this story, it’s so unique and attention grabbing with just enough humor and emtional family moments to keep the reader’s spirits up in the midst of the character’s tragic lives and situations. I hope you enjoy the rest of your journey with writing this story.
P. S. ~ Thanks for being bold and using your creative ideas to craft this amazing and heartfelt story— I love this story and my luck goes out to you for finishing on a strong note, just as the rest of the story has been so far.

Oh my goodness! Loved this chapter! I’m so glad taht the Cheif is finally accepting the role of fully protecting and supporting Samus—I mean it only took so long, especially with Kelly and Linda strongly voicing so! (Speaking of Kelly, ohhh my goodness I love her! Her attitude and personality are just so hilarious and relatable I was instantly attached to her character— great job with the humor as well! The part when Samus’s wound was infected was histerical, I nearly cried I laughed so much—also re-read it like a bagillon times) Going off of that note, I also enjoy the emotions portrayed between Fred and Kelly because it’s so infectious and warming for added humor and familial love themed in this story. All I have to constructively criticize (don’t get me wrong, I love this story and where it’s headed I just have a couple ways that you could improve your overall effectiveness and professionalism in the story to aid it in reaching sky-high results) is the grammatical structure and word choice repetitively used in the story such as, over usage of commas as well as too choppy sentences that could use some more creativity and difference with perhaps semi-colons, dashes, and colons wherever they’re deemed to fit properly. With all that shared, I hope you enjoy writing/crafting the rest of this story! Can’t wait to see what’s next!

Glad to see that this story is back in action

I am so glad I don't have to wait for the next chapter anymore

I love this story. I miss Metroid on my Game boy advance SP.

alright, cant wait for more of this
evil cortana needs a time out, maybe a timeout with the gravemind could help her :)

John: Why did you hit me?
Kellyshrugs* you were the closet thing to hit.

Aw, family fluff!

Really is a great read so far, but honestly you need a beta for this story. if you have one, they aren't doing a very good job. still your ideas are impressive, and the story is awesome. You may also consider putting line breaks in between the scene changes. without them I feel rather confused when it comes to the flow of the story. anyways, there is more I could say, but I am not the Beta for this story.

Keep writing, I'll keep reading;

Kit

Good and Interesting story keep it up i you need Idea i got few you might like and few co's to.

I personally Hated halo 5 story ,Cut Scenes they as a whole were poorly done .Same with the character dialog ,no real character development and plus they could have done so much more with Master chiefs Emotional and mental State such Going into PDTS and Such but they revered him into a bland character agains and he worse is Locke Team .The whole Story Sucks drag wish you had Winged it .

Military Soldiers picking a fight and assaulting a undisciplined genetically enhance Child with a advanced alien Armor and she is a Citizen with no rank ,Provoked by heavy trained Soldier that ,meant to be the best and discipledand then assaulted by them .That to get demoted and Assaulting and provoking a Citizen into defending them selves i think has high consequences .Exiling a Future Spartan Class Asset is also do not see the UNSC doing Especial one armed with New technology well in a they are losing

well, loks like cortana is jelly of sammy :) i guess she want that spartan all to herself

Is this story dead, or do you have a lot of writers block?