Awwwwwwww, kawaii once more! It's so cute! Their baby would be adorable! Especially since they're both different but imagine what their child would look like! I hope it's a girl! Like, she would be adorable Drew's eyes and hair but May's face and personality but Drew's sarcasm and ego at times.

Awwwwwwwwwwwwww, kawaii! Theier relationship is so cute in this I swear!
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Hiiii! I'm a friend of Piplup1212 in real life and I decided to snoop through her favorite stories list. I saw this and told myself: "Why not?"
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Anyway, I'm off to the next chapter!

O.O She's preggy!? XD Great chappie but five more!? TTTT So sad.

Naw, that was so cute. I love how May was so nervous. And then Drew knew exactly what to do.

I like it...

Nice

Haha, I loved it!

Loved it!

Thanks :)

Aww Drew, why you gotta be so adorkable.
This is not ooc or lame-it's fluff and wonderfully written! xD

Awwwwwe this was very cute, with Drew confiscating her bandana for some "reason" haha love it when he really fret over about her hair, it was adorable!

Okay, so I'm going to try to give out a good criticism regarding your story which is good but could use some work. Firstly:

"she had no idea of his presence" is a bit of an awkward sentence; I'd recommend perhaps putting "she had no idea that he was there" instead.

"gazzing happily at all the happy kids" is extremely redundant imo. Try using another adjective or verb even! "was mesmerized by all the happy kids", etc...

Your third paragraph about May's hair makes her seem bald XD I don't think that's what you meant, right? Maybe say that she had an unsual hairstyle where she kept her hair short on the back? :)

The paragraph about "making him wonder" is kind of awkward sounding. You don't need to use fancy expressions, you can literally just say "he often wondered if she kept her hair was naturally styled like this or if this was a side effect of the red bandana" etc... :)

made a typo, used he instead of his.

Also, at the end, it's compliment not complement.

bandana not bandanna

There's a lot more grammar mistake or spelling mistake and for this reason, I really recommend you to get a BETA corrector perhaps that can help you flesh out your characters and avoid those awkward sounding sentences. Or just run FFnet's spellcheck, it works wonders and could really help you! :)

Overall, you also might want to try writing out your setting: use everything: sense, smell, touch, how Drew feels, maybe how the sun is warm, or how the smell of grass was invigorating, etc... use your imagination!

It's a very cute story with a good idea behind it but I think if you worked on it more, it'd be even better!

Also, where did Drew get his rose? Did it just spring out of nowehere? XD (mind you, the anime doesn't have a better explanation!)

I liked that we got to see the difference between what's happening in reality and what DRew is thinking. It's a nice plus.

We all start somewhere and we all can improve. I hope my ideas/corrections can help you grow as an author and continue to spread the love of Contestshipping! :)

aha, sneaky Drew, you just kept her bandanna.
Nice, I can imagine Drew being curious, but not really saying anything

Lol. That's cute. Drew seems a tad bit OOC. But dumb,lame, and rushed? Not really seeing it. I love it! See ya and byes!