Please finish this I beg you

I would gladly help with this story I know it's super duper late but I love to write these kinda is stories when Hiccup let's his emotions out

Continua por favor

Hm. I like it. Poor Hiccup though.

Starts slowly, but gets better, especially once the tension between Stoick and Hiccup starts. There is a little too much tell, not show in the beginning.

Personally, it's enjoyable, but too long for fanfiction. I'd consider breaking it into chapters.

You capture the characters very well, especially Hiccup and his relationship with Stoick.

You should be pleased with this.

No worries dude! I hope you find another co-writer! But this story is AMAZING!

Please continue this...

Very well done chapter. I always thought that, unlike in the movie, the years of being tormented and demeaned would not suddenly disappear from Hiccup's thoughts, nor leave him unaffected. There would be issues both Hiccup and Berk would have to work out, and it would be painful for everyone. It would take time to come to terms with the abuse Hiccup suffered. Again, very good job at portraying everyone's thoughts here. And I can't believe I missed your first chapter when it came out. This is a great start, looking forward to the rest of your story.

mior spelling errors but i'm intrigued were this story is going

This lacks a pause, just to make the writing break apart, from one scene to another. Also, it doesn't seem realistic that Astrid would avoid him and then not know the reason for it. Hiccup is right, you can't just be busy for several days straight.

However, the writting portrayed its purpose and feeling well. Really good emotion! Raw and guttural,always good in dramatic scenes. The title of the story now makes sense which is already half of the job done.

Can I just say on a personal note, this piece writing was just radiating with warorpeace's personality. You could feel the author behind the work, don't ask why.

i thought this was very well written. Perfect emotional in depth. Perfect ending as well. A really nice balance between the father, the love interest and the the village. Most authors can't get the characters right, but you two were really good with that.

This thing took soooo long to read, you do not understand... But whatever it was worth it.

Great job! This is really a realistic approach at missing scenes in the movie. I can totally picture all of this happening. Well done.

Pretty good. This is all pretty good.
But I can't help but criticise a few things. Don't worry, no flames, just constructive criticism.
First, I think you made a mistake of diverting the topic too suddenly, probably unintetionally. At first Hiccup was bitter and somewhat resentful towards Berk because of his past and Astrid, Stoick and Gobber were worried he would run away because of that. In the cove Hiccup was at first very bitter, angry and showed a (in my opinion) rightfully unforgiving side, all of it still concetrated on the past. But you quickly changed the subject of Hiccup's bitter feelings toward the village because of the mistreatment to the new peace between vikings and dragons and appereantly Hiccup forgave the village then. But I think it actually left the whole issue completely unresolved because Hiccup's resentment did not come from the responsabilities or the vikings hesitation in befriending the dragons but from the unfair mistreatment of the vikings which caused him nothing but pain and misery so it seems illogical and somewhat unrealistic that he forgave them through a conversation on how difficult it is to get the vikings and dragons together and a few words from Astrid on how he isn't alone anymore and that he can count on and trust the same people who made his life a living hell and never even apologized, made it up to him for it and probably don't have the intention to.
So in my eyes it seems like too sudden change of topic and I also think you made Hiccup forgive the villagers, especially his peers, way too easy. Hiccup is human and feeling resentment, bitternes and anger is completely normal, especially for his situation. I can tell by your style of writing and depiction of the characters that you are type who writes in a very realistic manner and up to the first few minutes of Astrid and Hiccup in the cove it was realistic, but it changed when the topic changed too quickly from Hiccup's bitter ranting and his expressions of anger towards the villagers to the difficulties of viking and dragon cohabitation while at the same time Hiccup's rightfully unforgiving and bitter emotions turned too quickly to tiredness and again it changed too quickly to forgivnes. If it was on its own, that part could stand but it sems illogical, unrealistic and left several things and emotions unresolved when counting everything that happened before that. Hiccup suffered for 10 years at the hands of his own people. NOT his enemies or anybody else, but his own people. I think he should forgive them eventually but only after some time and after gaining some rightfully deserved apologies but I think you made the forgivness come far too quickly and suddenly and I've read many such stories, especially the ones in which he is initally resentful like yours. I believe it would have been better if Hiccup still felt some bitternes at the end of their conversation AND it would have been a fresh change. Nevertheless, it is still pretty good and I like your style of writing.

long chapter! loved it!
its not hard to believe hiccup will simply forget everything that had
happened to him in the last 10 years
like the dragons it will take time
good job!

I found this fic very enjoyable and I think that you did a great job describing both hiccup and astrid's anxieties