I really want another chapter soon please!

Come on don't leave me hanging line that? Please update ASAP!

Pls,pls,pls continue story. Will keep story to see if you've added more. If not,then I understand. Thanks

please updatethanks

I like it but is it all I mean chapter ten? Comon don't leave us like that please

I know it's been years but if you could find any inspiration to complete the honeymoon that would be amazing! I love your writing and would love to read how you write the trip to France. Even if you don't come back to this you wrote a great story.

You are a CHILD writing this and the small number of cheering reviewers are also children. If my ascertainment is true, that's a dang shame for you to tackle such material at what ever young age you might be and same for those likewise reviewers. You need to grow up, and read appropriate school age books/literature. Then later as an adult you can try your hand, with a bit more experience and hopefully success than this.

FanFic needs to have some monitoring means. However, the site is free and policing is most likely negligent! I didn't get as far as your last chapter but the recent "Guest" reviewer's remarks definitely echo what I'm politely trying to state.

Never give up writing. Just get better and tackle appropriate subject matter.

I would like to have the story of Christian taking the fam to Disney land, the concept makes me smile!

That was pretty much the worst so called lemon between Ana and Christian ever. He seemed like an amateur. And ramming the vibrator in her? Ouch. Only for her pleasure indeed. When Ana is biting her lip he is admonishing her "No. You're not doing that to me." and puts a blindfold over her eyes with Ana thinking this is to prove a point. Why? Because when her eyes are covered he can't see her licking and biting her lip? Sure. 2 times ramming a vibrator in her (and how Ana was surprised that it is actually vibrating) a little nipple teasing and she has the most powerful orgasm? That Christian really sucks at being Christian Grey. Everyone needs some time after an orgasm to come to their senses but is Ana dumb or what? She is watching him filling the tub and checking the temperature of the water and she is standing there dumbly asking what he is doing?

"Holy Hell, I've never been this close to a naked woman before without tying her up and fucking her senseless". Huh? Excpet maybe with the woman he is standing close now? They are married and on their honeymoon for God's sake! Of course he has been this close too her whilst naked without her being tied up or them fucking!

I just found this story, and I love it. Please update soon.

Love the story. Please update soon. You left us hanging. I am holding breathe for the next installment.

Really good chapter please update again soon

Don't keep us waiting too long! I want to know what Christian claims as his prize!

This is such a fun story to read. And it's very well written. Thanks for sharing!