Very good history. A continuation or an appropiate end for this would be very nice.

Your writing is quite good you are very strong in areas where a lot of people aren't. Though I do have some constructive criticism.
Your text flows well but, it can be hard to tell the difference between the types of text. For example the simple quotes is a good way to portray thoughts but, it can make it hard to tell between speech and what the character is thinking about. To fix this I suggest putting the thoughts in italics verses quotes. Also, you forget to make a new paragraph when a different person is speaking. As well as when it changes perspective. To fix these problems I suggest not being afraid of making new paragraphs don't be afraid to make a lot of paragraphs. Also, I suggest putting warnings before the chapter starts just in case someone is uncomfortable with the topic maybe eating disorders. Try to tell the reader what they are getting then that your writing is really good! Hope you keep up the good work! -sincerely a fellow anime nerd

i like how juane is so smart in this fic

Last chapter!
I liked this story, the road for Jaune to make Yang confess her problems were a tough road but nontheless enjoyable to read.

Although I will say that i think it should have ended somewhere at chapter 5. He got her to realise she needed help and they got together.
After that it was just problem after problem and more depressions, both the sudden new one between Ren and Nora, and Yang was also having new problems? I feel like chapter 6, 7 and 8 went compleatley offroad and didn’t make sence if i would compare them the story’s summary.

Nevertheless, I enjoyed this story, i liked the idea of it and it was interesting to read, so thanks for writing it!

I rate the moment on the bed 10 out of 10... heh
It’s nice that Yang is starting to feel better.. although what is happening to ren? Dundundun... hope he gets help too.

The feeeelz!
Loved this chapter! So much emotion in it, and I’m so glad Jaune got Yang to realize she had a mentall illness.

Things are heating up!

Great chapter, was a nice little scene where they danced before being interrupted. Also loved the dance off! Damn that was a battle which will go down in history! Also a nice moment where Jaune tried to confront Yang at the end, which ended with him sleaping over.

This is so good! I love it!
I feel bad for Yang and I hope Jaune will be able to help her.

I think this could have been an interesting fic, if not for the horrendous formatting which makes this impossible to read and enjoy.

I'll be honest I found your story jaune yang and quite beautiful clear by removing the end but the rest beautiful my respects author

This is absolutely golden writing...perfectamounts of drama and humor...i love it

Love the whole story 5/7 would starve myself again

Holy fuck man. This is why you should never piss off a psychiatrist. Poor fuckin Cardin

Sweet!