HOLY FUDGE. If she has dead looking eyes, than she's not exactly human. Not only that, but Ash is some how in an existence some where between reality and the dream world. Spooky!

This story is deep, dark, and disturbing in a good way. This silver haired chick sounds attractive and frightening. The dark gray fog is an awesome part of this chilling read too.

When will you upload the next chapter

Is the sash orange? I hope so...

Another great chapter! I wonder if he is still dreaming haha. I love how dramatic and action-packed the bridge scene is. Excellent pacing and story telling. I look forward to reading more.

what an exceptional chapter! I am so happy and excited. You are doing excellent work. Can't wait for next chapter.

A very interesting chapter here!

Very very interesting. The nightmare that Ash has is unique to me. I've been reading fanfics for years, and yet, this story stands out from the rest not only because it is different but also ambitious. The concept of never giving up and holding on to hope is not unique, but your approach to implementing it is. I look forward to reading the rest of the story.

Wow what a nightmare, I know its is stupid bit have you read the creepypasta just a nightmare, thats what reading this was like, any this could be big if you continued so if you doo keep up the good work.

excellent starting chapters length was good maintain this size or extend it if you like but don't cut it's size. just hope you update soon.

Story line up looks good