I don't know how a person can turn into a Heartless but, I'm pretty sure that Kairi did , right. I also think that this chapter was VERY well written. I couldn't stop reading it! My friend need my help really badly( she glued her hands together) and I just pushed her away and said "In a minute".

Ah, yes. I'm a little late. Just wanted to comment on your paragraph structure b/c honestly, I can't be bothered to read it with the...blocks of text stuck together.

It's a rule of grammar that you need to indent with every new speaker. For example:

"You promised you'd come back to me!" she said, surrounded by darkness.

"Kairi?" a voice asked.

(that was taken from the last paragraph of chapter 1)

I don't know if you're actually going to look at this very very very 2 year late review, but I am just saying, dialogueindent with every new speaker.

Please don't take this as a flame. It's very difficult on the reader to actually read a story with dialogue all crammed together.

Another thing that caught my eye: he said, she said. Now, I know that Steven King advocates this type of writing (in his book "On Writing") but it would be great if you had a lot more diversity. He asks, she said, screamed, shouted, so on. Get the gist? Okay.

Good luck on future projects.

poor Tifa tell me she's not going to be by herself please let something good happen to her update asap!

Another grand adventure! That's great that Vincent and Tifa are back! But it's sad that they still intend to hurt each other with the way everyone keeps loving another person. Will any of that ever stop? It might and might not I don't know! But it's still lookin' great!

Hades is such a cheater! I'm glad he got his butt kicked! But what's Maleficient going to throw at Kairi next? Looks like I'll have to find out!

So far I like it a lot. It's got funny moments, a little angst, romance, and LOTS of adventure! I like it! I hope Kairi finds Sora and everything turns out fine with Squall, Yuffie, and Rinoa!

Great story, I only have one complaint. Would you hurry up and finish the story? I've been waiting forever for the next chapter!

Please!

Don't leave Tifa alone!;-;

I like much more Tifa and Seph than SephAeris!

and Vinti!

Hello there;

You might remember me(or not ;;), as deity of death1.

If not, then just check out my bio page in

for any stories you find familiar.

But I digress; I've actually wanted to inquire about something.

A few months ago, you told me of a website that allowed you to roleplay as a person from video games and anime...

And I decided to roleplay as Yuffie from Kingdom Hearts(Hopefully this'll be familiar to you..).

And so, since my computer has just been freed of a virus(nasty little things, they are.. _ ;;), I have lost all connection to it.(Not to mention; I forgot the address of it...)

So I was wondering if you still know of that roleplaying website's address. If you do, and will email me back(or review; either is completely fine with me..;; But the latter is a good choice seeming as my inbox is totally defective and your email might not get through.. _ ;;) to give me the details, you will make me a very happy authoress.

Thank you again for considering this, and also for taking away bits of your spare time to read this...

I really do appreciate it. And if you happen to forget the address of it as well..well.. it's quite alright. _

Thanks again;

deity of death1

I really really like this fanfic of yours but one problem Tidus and Yuna are dead! They where my favorite couple for heaven sakes. Well in in your next chapter can you revive them or something?Please update

good zell from ff8 come?

Real smooth. Very tragic, though, with all those pairings enough to confuse a spider. A single complaint: Bad paragraphing. It hurts the eyes. PLEASE fix that in the next chapter, if you ARE going to continue this, which I hope you do.

are you dead? i've been waiting for you to update for months!

Um...it's okay and all but...
*Burns KH for its OOC FF characters!*
DIE! THE CHARACTERS ACT NOTHING LIKE THEY DO IN FF!
*Cries for Sephiroth's new voice!*
Okay...*sob* I liked your story...*sob* I'll forgive you...*sob*.. for making Cloud love Aeris...*sob* because...he's out of character...*sob*... and so is Aeris..*cries loudly*

cool story! i love this fic...please update soon! :)