How can you write a father/daugther fic with 11/Clara? I mean its canon that whouffle were in love! This is dumb af! Jeez -_-

This is so promising! Please don't quit!

Update this please!

This is just too adorable! Clara calling "The Doctor" Mr. John all the time is so funny and sweet. Please update soon, it's always an amazing read.

Hooray, a nice and longer chapter this time! And again, let me tell you that your new cover art is gorgeous.

Okay, I really liked the opening bits of this chapter. They were pretty heartbreaking, and I really feel like sometimes that's what the real, canonical Doctor does when he's feeling guilt over Gallifrey. And when it took on a lighter note it often really did sound like Eleven's enthusiastic voice peeking through. "A vest! He didn't know he owned a vest." I know it was a simple line, but this one was especially ... well, him.

Very cute scenes at the funfair. I loved seeing the concerned parent peeking through: "It's been a while since he was on a carousel, what if they became spinning death traps?" I really do think this is what parents feel half the time they take their children anywhere. Heck, I worry about the kids I babysit like they were my own children!

And awww, a big stuffed dog for little Clara. How precious!

There is one small issue however, which isn't too distracting. While your style is very clean you do bounce around between tenses a little, so if I were you I might do a small proofreading to fix this issue before posting from now on :)

This is absolutely one of the cutest things I have ever read. Please update as soon as you can! I love seeing Clara and The Doctor as a father/daughter pair. Again, please update as soon as you can! :)

Aw... Clara's adorable! :)

Okay I love the twist you've put on the Doctor and Clara, besides the very worn (although no less entertaining) whouffle plot line. Seriously, this story is one of a kind, and I'm looking forward to another chapter!

Oh, Amy being the spunky Scottish girl we all love her for. There's a reason the Ponds are my favourites! It looks like John knows how to manipulate her though. 50? Blimey, that's a lot of money! One small thing to nitpick at: since this is set in the UK, like the show, shouldn't it be pounds and not dollars? Maybe you can go back and fix that tiny thing? If you can't find a symbol for then maybe substitute that in with either the whole word "pounds" or "quid", which is a slang term. :) And little Clara is just the cutest. Can I just reach through the screen and cuddle her? Oh, and I loved the line "looking very devious indeed for a stuffed doll." Put a smile on my face. And what a nice cheesey fairy tale version of the Pandorica story, exactly the kind of thing a five y/o will lap up!

And that bit with Eleven - I mean, John - and River ... oh, please let my OTP be okay.

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Randomcat1832

Ooooohhhhh drama! I haven't reviewed in a while, but I still love it!

Aww... Poor John... Your story is really cute! :)

Very good work.

Awesome story! Can't wait til the next update!

-H.S.

Please please please more it is so cute

I usually ship the Doctor and Clara as a pairing but this is the most precious thing I have ever scene:-) well done