thank god someone finally made a good story for this anime. i hope you won't give up on this fanfic.

I'm honestly just glad that a Majikoi fic (that isn't OC galore) is getting updated

great story, plz keep writing. If you have writers block on where to take the story from here (sorry if that sounds rude) but I'd like to toss an idea your way. What if the children were artificially created... by mixing the DNA of both Yamato and Momoyo, making them the (biological) parents! Not bad huh, I would be super stoked if you did use it, but I won't be hurt if you didn't.

I liked this chapter much more than the other ones. Characterization was really well done in some parts (Momoyo taking her baby running or Miyako being stubborn to get a date), while other parts not so much.

First off, why is Reiko so confrontational? She's incredibly kind to Yamato, as she let's him live at the dorm for pretty much free, and has a good relations with all of her residents. She's understanding, not prone to anger (barring her son Gakuto of course) and has known these kids for years. Not only that, why is she being mean-spirited to Yamato as if he would try to weasel out of responsibility, when she knows he's a good kid. Not only that, she says it's their responsibility, despite the fact is isn't theirs, they found the babies. And she then went on about "no outside help?" What? Parents, especially new ones, always get help from other people and the like, because they themselves are inexperienced. Not to mention, these babies aren't theirs at all, so it would make even more sense to get as much help as possible. This isn't a science project in which they need to do their work independently.

Reiko may be boisterous and easily flattered, but she's not like this. Hell, since the babies showed up at the Dorm, the responsibility would usually go to Reiko, who for some reason is opposed to helping them, despite the fact she likes cute children as well.

So a lot of weird OOC for Reiko. Not to mention, why is Momoyo describing her sex life to her to an adult she is on good terms with? Momoyo may be brash and out-spoken, but not to her elders that she respects and values. Hell, Momoyo comes to the dorm a lot and is very thankful whenever Reiko takes care of her or gives her meals, so why the crass description? I could understand if she was explaining this to a rival or a person she wants to embarrass, but why Reiko?

Sorry for the rant, but consistent characterization makes or breaks a narrative.

I do love the Momoyo/Yamato interaction. Though Yamato seems to be the much more sensible one, which is understanding, since he's the tactician of the group.

Great story! I wish you could make more

These two must be from the future there nothing but trouble like there parents

i want more T.T

Please Continue.

Woah, you didn't waste anytime with the sex. Momoyo and Yamato when at it like bunnies.

To be honest, I couldn't see Momoyo as a mother. But that was cute when she tries to calm them down. Also strip - video game? Lol

"I can't take care of a baby right now"

Instantly gets two babies.

I don't know if that's dramatic irony, but I find that hilarious. Also I like the premise, with Momoyo and Yamato already being together and having copious amounts of sex. Very similar to the visual novel, especially with Momoyo being clingy of her little brother.

As the for plot of mystery babies, one looks like Momoyo while the other looks like Yamato. Babies from the future? It would also probably be smart to drop the babies at the Kawakami temple, but I wanna see Yamato and Momoyo be a mom and dad. But still, great intro chapter ad you should definitely continue.

Quick Question, why did Miyako and Chris attack Momoyo as soon as they got into the house? I'm feeling like we're missing an important detail.