His personality needs to be worked on, dudes to rude.

Wow. A rude MC that glares and spits. Bravo.

I hope you done really make him a 8 foot giant that's gross please don't Just give him the Thor look not the fkin hagrid look

soo on the point, I mean Danny comes into big bad slavers city with a few hundred men and three tiny ass dragons. by anyone with two brain cells should have her men killed (may be her too) and try to control the dragons with feed it till it listens to you method

I can't believe I have to leave the same review on two stories in a row, but here we are;

Murderhobos don't make for compelling characters.

Oh..

What a garbled mess. The first half was pretty decent. You followed a path and made at least fairly logical decisions.

These past 10 chapters though, you've gone completely off the rails. There has been zero logic to find anywhere in your story. It's been one confused, drug-induced, bi-polar, poorly thought out chapter after another. No plot, no logic behind his actions, no explanations behind his actions, no consistency neither in character nor in direction. It's been some of the worst writing I've ever seen. And then you ask for donations. To pay for this.

You seriously think too highly of yourself. It comes off so clearly in your writing, propping yourself up, trying to show off your great intelligence. All it makes you seem is ignorant and stuck up, and it drags the reader out of the story.

Try writing with any sort of plan in mind. Try writing something that would make sense to anyone not caught in your tiny, basement-dwelling world.

Better luck next time.

Oh, now you're back to splitting little girls in halves and cutting down toddlers.

You seem like a terribly inconsistent writer with a god-complex.

Oh yeah, you're so moral with your massive ship of slaves and whores. They all have their freedom and are treated so humanely.

Seriously. Pick one. Stick with it.

Why's he being all noble and shit now? Just earlier he was breaking women's teeth so they wouldn't bite when sucking his cock and ripping the skin off people to make them talk. Maybe you've been taking long breaks between chapters and just forget what your character was like.

Okay? That was just out of nowhere and pointless, but okay. I fail to see how that was dark though, more silly than anything.

The best part about this chapter is the ignorant author trying to lecture a reviewer about the factual science of a grown man in a 9 year old's body. Let's not mention the fact that there are plenty of very calm, rational and "grown up" 9 year olds out there, the fact is neither you, me nor anyone else would have -zero- idea how this would properly work, so calling another guy a dumb fuck for disagreeing with your opinion/interpretation is just ridiculous beyond all means.

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lolwoot!

Lol wow total fail