That ending was very rushed and not very well written, sorry. But, that was an interesting story. Nicely done.

Okay, two things. Third paragraph, you wrote 'try' it should be 'tray'. And when Renge is talking, she says fiance, not husband. But other than those two things, it was great. This also gives me an idea for a story, thanks!

Interesting. Panic disorders are not fun, I once had to help an acquaintance because she started having an episode, never had to deal with it, but I managed to help. It's scary if you don't know what to do or how to help. Anyway, good work. Longest chapter you've done so far, nice. :)

Oh dear, everything is squished together and difficult to read. Maybe you could double space it? It's also cool that you used characters made by people especially for your story. Easier than coming up with all your own. Decent work.

First day, best way to make friends and make a good first impression, bring treats. It almost always works. :) Nicely done.

Interesting. I thought I might as well read one of your stories and review since you were so kind as to review my story! This sounds pretty interesting, and though short, it's sweet.

It's been a good time! Thank you for making this story

CHI, DON'T YOU DIE ON ME! HA!

Great chapter! Write more :)

Ah, Mark. My tiny child. Also cool Mira works, yeeee my slightly taller child.

*tiny squees* Oh god, they're charactrized perfectly! Sorry I hadn't reviewed early, I don't have a lot of time lately. But yay Mira and Mark!

Sorry that I haven't been reviewing (I've gotten lazy.) I care~ Oh, and what type of story?

Ah, so I see the OCs were introduced. Everything seems good so far :) Well, I liked this chapter and please update soon .
~AnimeBestie ;3

Christmas Eve! That way the chapter will come faster. Hopefully it's long. And yay you updated like promised! Update soon
AnimeBestie TT

you better update that chapter, or i'll eat all the chocolates in the world, and none for you!