God Alphonse, you are the biggest sweetheart on the planet.

Jeez, so many misunderstandings. Ron's explanations are so unclear, even for someone who knows exactly what he's talking about. However, he is incredibly in-character! Kudos for that!

Oh my god, amazing first chapter. The idea of Ron and Alphonse together is just so endearing. Ron is such a big brother in a different way than Ed. Can't wait to read on!

Interesting concept

This is quite good.

Wait. Is that reference at the end what I think it is? Are you Metagaming by any chance?

I love how you’re developing Nott! The inner contradiction between the way he was raised and what he’s deciding and learning for himself is so damn interesting! And oh no! Tracy! *the guilt* I love how you’re making the Slytherins developed, 3-dimensional characters!

And the sheer irony of that last sentence in relation to the next POV provides the perfect transition.

I don’t think my heart should be beating this fast. Should my heart be beating this fast? Anyways my heart was already ripped open on the ground and you just had to run it over with a steamroller of broken glass, didn’t you? Anyways? You’ve made me feel for them, for everything, so much that I could barely read a sentence at a time with minutes between them, and it was still so so fucking devastating. That’s how good you are.
Ed’s POV destroyed me, turned me into a sobbing, incoherent mess
I’m in awe.
AND THE FUCKING LAST LINE OF THAT POV
I knew it would hurt so much when he finally snapped out of denial, but I didn’t know it would hurt *this much*

Oh god. Every single option in this situation is beyond terrible, isn’t it?

OwO - things at the school seem to be ramping up, are they? Very intriguing!
Fuck, I just realized there's not even a background - there's not even anything to do
And after Al's whole crisis about him not being real and Ed creating him for his own selfish purposes
I don't think this is something any of them will ever be able to get over
I bet Truth's laughing, wherever it is - this seems like exactly the kind of twisted, ironic thing it would love/game it would play
*insert incoherent typing through haze of tears*

First off, loving the inbreeding explanation and the slow acceptance of Muggle science Nott Jr. went through! V well thought out and a v interesting perspective!
Now back to my gradual panic attack XD - the steadily increasing desperation and the horror and the guilt that's so thick you could drown in it - if this was a movie or something, I could deafen myself and read the subtitles through barely open eyes, but this is just reading and oh god everything is Not Okay and I can't see a way to make it okay and I'm so morbidly fascinated and so horrified at the same time and from what you said, apparently it's gonna get even worse
(Thank you for stabbing all these rusty knives into my heart)
And the fact that their relationship with each other is pretty much the most important thing in the world to them makes everything so so much worse

So, thank you for making me cry you utter monster you - I had to take so many breaks to even get through the painting scene and the emotion is so palpable and everything is terrible and everything hurts and oh god, the fucking implications, I can't stop thinking about them and every time I do it makes me want to sob and scream all over again
I can practically see Al's thought process and oh god the next Al POV - I'm not fucking prepared
AND WHEN ED REALIZES
FUCK FUCK FUCKKKK
*i might be sick*
(No, but in all seriousness, you're an amazing writer to be able to convey this kind of tragedy and emotion so fucking well and I admire you so much for it! Kudos to you!)

Hello, yes, this story is so fucking amazing so far! Alphonse-centric stories aren't too common, which, tbh, is a right shame b/c he's such a cool character! I love your writing style and your characterization and your philosophical quandaries that you introduce and how realistic everything seems - the seeing him as a Horcrux is so unique and leads to such interesting interactions - I also love your take on alchemy - like, it's a science in FMA canon, so I love that your reasoning is the tectonic plates and different molecular weights - (instead of having an entire branch of science not work just because) it's possible, def, but it takes work b/c of that - I adore stories that tackle alchemy from a scientific perspective, as it's described in canon! Your writing is also super great, perfectly paced and flowing really well! I love how well you get inside the characters' heads and their thought processes and god, everything about this story! I honestly can't wait to see where you go next with it!

Well written story

The Elephant House is where JK Rowling first wrote Harry Potter you nerd!

Hello! Not sure if you'll read this but i want to tell you that this story is amazing! I really really love it! And i really like your writing style :)
I'm not sure if you'll update this story but just in case i faved and followed this story. But if you really abandon this, it would be great if you give a summary of how this story would end. Just so readers like me won't be left hanging wondering what'll happen after the last chapter :')

You know that reference to the real world was just SO subtle