Really great thus far, except for a few minor grammar mistakes. I think you need to elaborate on the scenes and the emotions in the scene a bit more, so the reader really feels in tune with the characters and the story. I really like the idea that you've decided to make into a story.

Omg! I love this so far u are an amazing writer keep writing plz!
Update soon xoxo Jill

She's a hufflepuff? No way. I don't beileve it. Hufflepuffs' are kind and happy not sarcastic and depressed.
Albus should tell Scorpius. There's nothing stoping her from trying again.
Scorpius should also end up with Rose.

Once again I loved this! I genuinely have no criticism for this chapter! And that part about Kreacher _.

This is great so far. I can't really figure out Al at the moment but I think I like him a lot (apart from him saving Aisling). He seems like the person who really couldn't give a shit. I'm glad you started writing this!

I really like your story but I think your second chapter didn't upload very well :)