It was a good story, if a bit hard to read in some places. Spelling makes a huge difference and there are places where you used words that didn't fit with your intentions but sounded like the correct words...sort of. You should definitely work on avoiding redundancies and I'm sorry but the I st using the word chit near the end really pulls the reader out of the story. All in all a nice story but it would have been a great one with a little more polishing.

Oof this is painful. I really hope you're either very young or that English isn't your first language. And when I say painful I mean in word choice, sentence structure, syntax, punctuation, grammar, etc. It's like you uploaded a rough, rough draft. Take pride in your work. Review and edit before publishing. The storytelling itself could use some help, but sometimes that just comes with practice. Oh and I don't know why I swore the step mom's name was Karen, maybe I need to watch the movie again.

Ah so this is your spin on Thousandfurs, or whatever that old fairytale is called. I'm glad you didn't make her dad incestuous, that always turns my stomach. Let's see how creative you get with mixing these two tales...

Um I know this is super old, but why did you rename the step mom? Her name's Karen, not Irene. It's just weird, like you're writing based on a story you've never actually seen before.

Can’t believe this is over. I eagerly await your next masterpiece. Thanks so much for continuing the love of Jareth and Sarah.

I very much enjoyed this, thanks for writing! Finally got to finish and comment.

Very nice story, thank you for writing it :)

I liked it.

You have written an amazing story. It is one of my favs. Thank you!

this has been a really good story. I kinda didnt like that the labyrinth "allowed" her to win though. thats a big accomplishment that i feel was taken away from Sarah. over all I think all your stories are well written though.

I was so happy to see this chapter but very sad to know only one left.

You are just full of surprises lol, well done! I'm sad to see it come to an end

Wonderful story! Enjoyed it so much!

Wow, what a twist! I didn't see that coming, well done!

Go Sarah!