OCs who replace the original protagonist are never interesting because they act like chinese bootleg versions of the original. That's no different from changing Yu Narukami's hair into green and calling him Kenji Midori.

The last review was from 2015... consider it changed to 2018.

It's rather unfortunate that you've left this dead in the water for roughly a year and a half now, though if you're still working on this, give us a message. This was mildly interesting, despite it's flaws.

Not many people would consider writing Black Bullet fanfiction, even a crossover. Though it'd be nice to see the archives have a little bit of activity from time to time.

Nice story. Your writing got a lot better since the beginning.

then what are the cursed children then?
why does Varanium affect them?

wow... nice revelation. good story albeit I don't like hot headed MC but its tolerable. At least the plot thickens.

he can't summon persona without the evoker? I still didn't understand the imbalance on his character. fighting for 6 months with high end persona and he still inexperience in some manner and dependent on evoker plus his shadow... he haven't accepted it which probably means why his first and original persona won't answer him but just like I ask... why not use other persona? like jack frost and cast mabufu?

hmm so its 1 year after the incident in inaba where yuu beat izanami no okami. but where is yu? I know yu survive the fight while makoto sacrifice himself.

i'm still going blind on your story but its getting interesting.

too hot headed and why so why when I'm reading fic. authors tend to pull out end game persona on a simple fight that low level persona can do. Why not use pixie? for dia? though this is a severe wound that needs severe healing but for attacks? kin ki? saturnus? he can use his basic persona and it will do the same. Trying to be flash? plus his back story is a bit shaky. How did he made contact with inaba persona users? and time difference? where is Yuu/Souji? he has end game persona but who was his social links?

this is the problem with OC's... lack of information and character understanding for them. For now. I only picture this guy as hot headed fool that has power but really like knowledge on how to use it. heck, how did he become a fool? and who is his basic persona?

you know for a fool his not acting like a someone from fool arcana. his more like a chariot with that kind of behavior.

Gastrea are actually shadows!? DUN DUN DUNNNNNNN! EPIC PLOT TWIST! Hahahaha! Nice one! Also, two chapters uploaded at once? Not bad! Looking forward to this revelation and when Yuuto can once again call upon his persona! Do svidanya, comrade.

...what?

so personas are worthless since the mc is getting kick around by everyone from what i see, rentaro and the monsters are easily overpowering him

Hmm, much shorter than I thought it'd be, but I can't be too stingy. Wonder what will happen next. Do svidanya, comrade.

great story but what about persona resistance in that fight he could have used kin ki to null strike.

I'm very disappoint... where is Persona?

I expect something more, much more. He doesn't have to win but to not use what he has in disposal was really stupid.

Sorry for my rant. Sometime when you expect something so much, but the thing was far from live up to that expectation really...

Sorry BTW