It should be a crime to make me cry like that !

So, I read them all.
And there are all great. I love the way you write those lost souls. You found a perfect motivation for each one. I just can say congratulations for such a good set.
May I ask for one on Remus or on Peter?
Thank you for your writing!
Cya,
Orlane S.

This first one is really well written. I saw the Marlene that I imagined too. Plus, your writting show the horror of the war.
Good job here ;)
Cya,
Orlane S.

Could you add Aberforth? I think he was in the first order.

Poor Sirius.
I really liked the way you talked about his life before Hogwarts. I feel like of what I've read, people never really make it too believable for me. They usually go one way or the other, making him overly resent his family from the start, or just totally supporting his family's views until meeting the marauders starts to change him. I liked that he had both sides in him early on, and then situations and his own choices ended up shaping him into the man he would eventually become.
I also like the emphasis you put on freedom. That's all dogs want, isn't it? No one is ever truly as happy as a dog running freely through an open field. I hope that's how Sirius feels in the after life. He and James in animagus form running through open fields together. I think he'd like that.

I really liked reading this chapter. I've always loved Alice and Neville, and the Longbottoms... (as I believe we've discussed)
But, I just got a really good feeling from this, even though the whole wizarding war is such a sad dark time... I don't know, something about reading about all the hopeless feelings she went through, but being the reader, and having the advantage of knowing that they did win the war in the end. It's a good feeling, seeing how their fight WAS worth it, and their world did get their happy ending, even if they couldn't be there to enjoy it.
I wish I could jump into the fic, and be like "Hey, guys! You did it! The good guys win!" But, then that would probably take away the beauty of story. It's deeper and more real, because there are dark times mixed in with the light. Even if everyone dies, at least they also lived.

Thank you, thank you ever so much!
I always felt so sorry about Sirius, who in the eyes of someone else would be the perfect son, but in his family's eyes was a shortcoming. It always felt like there was no other way for his life to end, like there was no hope for something better for him despite all his best efforts and his golden heart. It is really sad when a person always tries for the very best and at the end achieves nothing and even loses everything.
My favorite phrase? "(and it was so very easy, but then, most fatal mistakes are)" It makes me think of all the what-if's...
Thank you once again; it was a wonderful chapter like all the previous ones and I loved it.
Keep updating new stories- I'll be ever so interested in reading them.
PS: If you search for tragic characters, take a look at the Black family tree! There is Andromeda, Regulus, perhaps Narcissa...
Sending my love :)

I simultaneously love you and hate you for this.

A heart-rendingly, tragicically beautiful story for all those who have died young for a cause noble and just, but whose death has left unhealed wounds in the hearts of those close to them. Heroes all the same, saviours, I believe, but noted for only the things they did in their short time on Earth, while the list of the things they would have done and would have been able to do would be endless truly.
These chapters captured me to the very last of them though I liked best the women; Marlene, the female warrior, perhaps the Bellatrix of the Light side in some ways and Lily and Alice, the mothers who gave everything away for their sons so selflessly, so without-a-second thought. Lovely the way you portrayed them, indeed.
However I am only a little disappointed you didn't add Sirius in here; I know he did not literally died in the First Wizarding War, but a piece of him did die; he lost James and Lily forever by his own fault, he lost Peter, who had been all that time a traitor rather than a friend, and he had lost Remus whom he suspected to be the actual traitor. Plus he had already lost his family who never stood by his side and spent thirteen years in Azkaban for a crime he did not commit. Doesn't he deserve a in memoriam too?
And technically Sirius died before the open (Second) Wizarding War, so... would you be interested to add one more chapter? Please?
Congratulations once again!

These are beautiful. I love it.

This is breaking my heart, but I can't stop reading.

God, I love this story so much, but it kills me.

This was a good chapter, the description was vivid, but I don't think wizards necessarily slash and dodge in battle.

[slashing and dodging as if she'd never done anything else] - I can see the dodging, but not the slashing. There are particular wand movements for most spells, and although some of them would be slashing, some would also be a swish, flick, twirl or both. I think using only slashing to describe the action is a little inaccurate. And about the dodging - wizards have the ability to cast protection spells such as protegro, which causes an invisible shield to appear between them. And since they're in the order, it makes sense that they would use the actual spell rather than just dodging.
[waving their weapons like new-found toys] - why the plural for weapons? The only thing a witch/wizard fights with, is their wands, so there wouldn't be need for plurals, and the word weapons could actually be replaced with wands entirely, because wands are basically the only weapons they have. I think it would increase the accuracy of that sentence.

Remember: Wizards/witches are not humans, they don't fight with weapons and use a lot of physical skills (slashing, dodging) like us. Instead they just use their wands.

Apart from those, this chapter was alright, and I applaud you for your effort. Keep up this story!

xx
HybridsRose

I really liked this chapter. (And the date seems so appropriate.) I don't know how it never occurred to me how Lily died thinking she had failed her son. I feel so stupid for having missed that! I mean, I understood the sacrifice, and her pleading for Voldemort to spare him, but wow. I'm seriously kicking myself for having missed that!
I mean, I guess I always just saw it, taking into consideration the grand scheme of things, how in the world that Rowling built, there seems to be an afterlife, (or at least, that's how I saw it.) from seeing the 'ghosts' (for lack of a better word) from Voldemort's wand in the graveyard in GOF, Lily and James, (and Cedric, and Frank Bryce) to me it felt like that they were literally with him in the graveyard (I don't mean like 'duh they were there, Harry saw them') I mean that their presence in that scene was different than when people had been 'absent' but had a presence somewhere through a magical object. (Riddle's Dairy, the marauders insulting Snape through the marauders map.) and then, there was the reserecting stone, which (from what I remember, I haven't read that one too recently) they also seemed to have been with Harry, not just in that moment where they were visual, but also like they kind of knew what he had gone through over the years, and they hadn't just been 'nowhere' the whole time they were dead, they didn't seem like they were 'waking up' from the dead. So, basically I consider that in the end they saw what played out, even if they couldn't be there in life.
But, still - in that moment, while Lily died, she thought that would be the end for Harry. And I feel like that was a pretty important detail that I missed, and I love you for seeing it, and writing it, and bring it to my attention.

Poor Frank. (And Alice, obviously. All the Longbottoms) I really liked the brief mention of his parents. I don't know if people write much about Frank's relationship with his mother, but if they do maybe I just haven't seen it. (And there seems to be even less mention of his father (as far as I've seen). I've always liked Frank and Alice, for whatever reason. And this chapter has sort of re sparked my interest. I shall have to go out of my way to read them more!
Oh, yay Lily's next! I'm really looking forward to reading her part! (I could never quite figure out how I see her character. I mean, I understand her role and it's significance in the Harry Potter series, just as far as personal head canons, I guess I haven't quite figured her out!)
PS: I swear I did tell my friends to read this fic! I'm just going to have to tell them again, and bug them until they read, and leave a lengthy review! You and your writing really deserve more love!