This is a very unusual story. Tobey as Jareth's replacement with an out of control Labyrinth, growing through that experience, and Jareth's reaction to Tobey's maturing are thought provoking. Thank you for this excellent work.

This is brilliant! I also like the side bits in Narnia, do you think you could explore that a bit more? Maybe make it a full crossover?

I am the woooooooorst because this is what? Two years old? WHY AM I SO TERRIBLE?

Anyway, this is all of my favorite things! I love how you wrote Toby and that you included Roommates canon and are those Runners characters from somewhere else or some people you made up? I love Toby's sense of "style" and that J and S taught him "drama, not ruling" and this is just perfect and I love it. Thank you so much!

There is something really special about the start of this story.

Love-love-loved your Toby: The Runner's Champion. You wrote him just right for that awkward pre-teen stage, trying very hard to construct his self-identity. Dressing like a pimp *snort*

My faves:

"His seeming omniscience (which is really a product of obsessive control issues and absolute power)..."
"So far, the strategy has apparently been abject surrender."
"Toby can't get away with wearing leather pants."
"…even if they didn’t teach him how to run a kingdom, his sister and brother-in-law taught him drama."

Great stuff. Not every author can weave a sustainable humour through their narrative, but I get the feeling that you are up to the task. Following this story like a shadow :)

wow! Now this is a UNIQUE story! I cannot wait to see how it goes. Poor Toby! I'm guessing that the Laby is experiencing PMS...

So funny. LOVE Jadis being Jareth's mom. Are you going to bring any other Narnian crossover characters into it? Or from other fandoms? Middle-earth would be fun; also Discworld. Discworld! OMG, can you imagine the staredown between Jareth and Granny Weatherwax? The multiverse would stop...anyway, great story and I so look forward to more.