That was an interesting pairing and not one I ever would have though of before, and you wrote such an odd pairing without doing it as a crack pairing, which is impressive. You have good imagery and some nice turns of phrase here. I like the way you kept the theme of their colors throughout the fic and that together they became cyan.

You have a "c" tacked onto the beginning of "the" in "cards all pointed toward cthe ruin of cyan". I didn't spot any other typos or grammatical errors.

I think I never read a story or drabble about Amy and/or Dennis before, but you really made it work for me. I love the suspense that you kept building till the last sentence, that sense of despair that gripped me, as the reader, right from the start. This sent shivers down my spine with every line! The only thing I'd maybe change is the last sentence, because "the one still trembled underground" seems a little odd to me and doesn't flow as nicely as the rest of the drabble. Apart from that, it's great!

Oh, wow. This was really interesting. I haven't read anything with the Carrow twins before (presumably because if I recall correctly they're both movie-only characters), but your characterization of Flora was really interesting and captivating, as were Theo's thoughts on Hermione and why he disliked her (which also all seemed believable, and made me feel a bit of righteous anger on his part). The ending was also really interesting. The third to last paragraph turned really creepy really fast, but in a good way (assuming that's what you were intending), and I like that in the end it seems they have something kind of between a friendship and a romance, or at least that it's not a full-blown romance (where a romance is what I was expecting at first, and I always like to be surprised).

Anyway, great one-shot! The title also really grabbed my attention.

This is an interesting expansion on a couple of minor characters who we don't know much about from the canon.

I like the way you had Theodore's feelings evolve over time, from being jealous on Flora's behalf for her not getting the attention he felt she deserved to being glad that other people didn't notice so he could keep her to himself.

I didn't spot any spelling or grammar errors. I'm impressed with the speed at which you managed to write a piece of this length (IIRC, it was only a little over an hour.)

Aww. This is really different, and I like the characterisation of Theo in this. I'm curious about what Flora is doing with her flowers and healing, and also about the project she's taken on from her mother.

There are mistakes dotted around closer to the top, easily fixed because it's just words with a letter missing, or a missing word all together. A scan through would probably fix it.

I think this will make a good MC, and I'll keep an eye out for it. Doing a sneak peak has intrigued me.

I thought this was nice, but that's about it. I can see where you're getting at with the Drabble, and it was cute and enjoyable to read. However as I have gone straight to the last chapter (as you requested) I didn't know who the characters were until your note, so maybe referencing some names beforehand would have been helpful. Good job

I LOVE IT!

I like how you have Snape just being himself, leaving it up to Lily to initiate things. They both seem to be in-character.

And this is such a short drabble, but you have me melting into a puddle of goo from the fluffiness! :D

I didn't spot any spelling or grammar issues.

These are all really good! My favourite was The Rise and Fall of Cyan - something about how mysterious it was.

Wow, this was just... I can't think of the right adjective.

I like the way you've written Petunia here, how she's combating her insomnia by developing an obsessive-compulsive disorder (as if that's not MORE abnormal) and the last line was perfection.

Ooooh, what an interesting pairing. I like both these characters in their own rights, actually (even though I ship NarcissaLucius) and I really enjoyed this. The way you began it had me hooked from the beginning and your description was really lovely. I'd actually now like to see more of this pairing. I really enjoyed it.

A very nice job with this - well done!

First of all, congratulations on tackling such an obscure pairing. I really enjoyed the style of this, it was new and interesting. Great job!

This was interesting to read, although I'm not sure I can believe this pairing... Narcissa is too refined to slum it with someone like Scabior! Then again, it was during her wild teenage years, so maybe I can believe it. (The dude is supposed to be Scabior, right? Or is it Greyback?)

I didn't spot any spelling or grammar issues.