you've got some spelling errors

I read your story and I have to say it's a good story but you need to fill it out more you've got a good story here but it needs more body this is a story that you should take your time and do well good luck

have you worked on any sequels to this story?

The original idea is truly an attractive one but work on your punctuation and description skills. I wihtout a doubt will keep a close look onto the story and check if you've improved, check out my ff as well and return the favour :)