I had a blast reading all 21 chapters! It seems a bit weird seeing Mewtwo "ordered" things around during the training, when at the same time, Ash was his trainer. But, I still enjoy the pace of the training and all.

I love the comedies in this story! Especially when Dawn was jealous, hahah. And Brock finally had a chance! It was a bit... off seeing Ash carrying the book containing all numbers of the person he met, but still! I enjoyed every second reading this story.

Hopefully you continue this story :D

Dude I wanna see this

Characters don't really feel like characters. Its just yelling back and forth between talking heads that flit from one topic to the next. None of the characters are believable. You also have a lot of frankly unnecessary scenes like the battle with Barry or Brock getting set up with that girl. None of those really advanced the story at all and were just things that happened. I'm also unsure why you're introducing Bianca. You already have so many characters that are just cardboard cutouts with throw away lines I don't get why we need more even more characters.

I would suggest paring down the number of characters that get focus. The ones that are left should be fleshed out more and toned down from the "haha funny anime hijinks" because literally no one actually acts that way. I would give more thought to things like Mewtwo just randomly contacting him with a deus ex machina for every little problem he has. Like the time stop thing? It makes one question how or why that's even possible and raises a lot of questions about what else could be done with time stop powers. And its really frankly unnecessary for meeting up with Ash.

The date scenes earlier with Ash and Dawn were kinda bad too. The characters weren't really displaying any chemistry and the scene was just a lot of [food order plus drink] [here's your food order plus drink] [warm feelings]. I'm not really well read with romance literature so I don't have super specific advice here unfortunately.

Sad face stopped right at the good part

Does shoe look like someone specifically in her human form or is it an Oc?

I loved the plot twists... Please continue the story... You are an amazing writer!

Dang... I thought for sure the voice would be Latias since she's also a Psychic-Type and in the pairing with Dawn. Don't get me wrong, I like that Mewtwo's here, it's just a bit unexpected.

This is really good, I'm glad I found this when I did, and hope it continues soon. The battle against Tobias will show exactly how much Ash has grown since Mewtwo started helping him.

Also, I've been wondering, I know the main focus of this story is Ash beating the Sinnoh League, but how long do you plan to continue this after that? I doubt he'd be completely satisfied for good just winning one league, and I bet Dawn and his veteran Pokémon would follow him anywhere at this point. Are they going to take Unova by storm, or do you have something else in mind?

Danm. Of course the chapters stop right before the battle between Ash and Tobias. I'm really enjoying the story. Main complaint is that the relationship between Ash, Dawn and Sapphire should have been fleshed out more but the story is still enjoyable regardless.

I have one thing to say. Stop with the damn filler chapters damn it. Good day.

I hope you dont hold back on this battle he has the power and force to win the league he better bring the big guns

hey are u a nuts ?
ash vs tobias?

Ooh boy! Ash vs Tobias eh? This will definitely be a challenging match! I look forward to Ash showing his strength! Especially seeing as he HAS to defeat Paul and prove who’s ideology is better! But I wonder, what could Tobias be hiding?

Good to have you back! Keep up the good work!

Contra tobias el equipo top
Latias
Mewtow
Charizard
Sceptile
Tiranitar
Pikachu

Great seeing this story updated in a long time and from what I've seen between ash and Cynthia it seems she's developed a crush on ash to i have a feeling that she also wants to be ashs girlfriend because there's something about ash that's got her interest and other things that has caught her interest that she doesn't see in other boys she came across especially that special connection she feels with ash that makes her heart beat faster I wouldn't mind seeing Cynthia becoming ashs girlfriend to its your choice but I think she be a great addition to the group