Update pleasee((_))!

It is a great story. hope you come back to finish it. It is interesting. Very probable that the government would do such a thing to any creature that they believed was dangerous and very powerful. Now this story is surprising. The way that Kana and Rikuo would fall in love, what are you going to do to them? Why is Nurarihion as a patient when he was the hospital's founder?

Rosa you really have to update this story its VERY interesting i really want to know whats next. So please update soon!

rose-sama,i really admire u n love to read ur just like u,imma hardcore fan of Kana-chan,so,um...could u pweeeaas update ur stories or maybe start a new one,that's if its not too troublrsome,sorry(hides face)also,...U N KANA ROCKSo

I really liked the cliche atmosphere that you set up for the beggining of the story because it immediately sets the town and shows the type of person Kana is too. I also love how she is human enough to believe in bad luck because it also shows a different side of her. I also liked how you made her interview between the head because it shows how she was raised and how she does not wish to be appased. I also like how we see the craziness of the patients in the first chapter and the strength because it gives into the dark nature and how grave things are. I await more of this fiction.

On to chapter 3! Wow, it has been too long since I’ve done a review for you, but I’m ready to pick up right where I left off.

Ok, so the cards for fortune telling are a little confusing. I know she’s at a mental ward and things don’t always make sense, but I’d like to know who is talking right up front and who they are talking to. The little blimps of dialogue, however are very funny once you get to the point where you know who is talking and that it is driving Kana a little crazy herself.

“…defeated the cross dressing monster…” would be the correct English idiom.
I don’t remember a kid with his mouth sewn shut *shivers* The fortune sounds like a bunch of fortune cookies. I really love them. They are vague and still a little precise and kinda spooky! Take care of switching between past and present tense, I found a couple of little errors like that in this section. Wait, Shiki’s telling the fortunes? Maybe I should have re-read the last chapter again. I’m so confused. I thought it was Itaku.
The kids are cute, and depending on the kids ages, the way they talk (grammatically incorrect is actually very clever.
“…while he pouted at the mess she did…” the idiom would be “…at the mess she made…”
“She extended her at him to take.” I think you left the word hand out of this sentence.

“They regretted the minutes they wasted on it.” Oh man, that’s harsh and funny!

I love the little diagnoses that are peppered about each child.

“I also thought the same…” Oh?! A mystery who is this copy of Itaku?

Farewell smile? I think you might mean faraway smile.

Aww, the talk with Taku is really cute. I’ve got no clue why he doesn’t look like himself, but it’s anime and the first rule of anime is to go with it, so I’ve done that.

This is the craziest insane asylum I’ve ever read about. It sounds like they are playing this huge game right inside the asylum and I love the way Kana just goes with it. Does she think she’s still asleep maybe?

The battle scene was really well done, with lots of excitement, and action!

Yokai! Ah, so she’s finally clue into the fact that her charges aren’t human. I love how matter of factly that is thrown in.

Oh! I love the acronym of kill or be killed. That’s clever. Is it canon?

“Over my dead pink pajamas!” Holy crap, that’s a great, funny line!

Taku’s dead!? Oh, wow, so now I feel really bad. I had gotten to like him in the course of this chapter.

This chapter was full of good feels. Good job, Rose.

Rose! Congratulations on winning the last round of Level Up. And to reward all your hard work, I've decided to review this story. I'm glad to finally have a chance to get back to it, really.

I really like how you start right in with the fulfillment of what had happened in the first chapter. Kana is just now waking up and her confusion ads to the suspense of the story.

"...plain A4 paper..." That's a nice detail that makes the setting consistent with the actual world it is set in. Since I'm an American, I had to actually think about that size paper and picture it, but it is standard in so much of the world that it is a very attractive little detail.

"...similar to mine." it was... "It" should be capitalized.

That awkward joining in at the laughter sounds very ominous.

"Why would he do that you ask?" I found this statement a little odd. I think this technique is called "breaking the fourth wall" and it means addressing the audience directly. It just feels odd to have it suddenly turned on me (the reader) since you haven't done that anywhere else in the story (that I can recall). Also, I believe there should be a comma between "that" and "you."

"...a legal hospital is ( should be "was") in such a deserted..."

"...bruise on her side stung..." That's a great little detail. Her wounds are still fresh enough to hurt from something as innocuous as a shower. What do you mean by "waterproof button"? That's a phrase that seems odd in English.

"and a bice blue dress shirt." Nice?

"...thus a new head is taking his place." "...head took his place."

"She have also read..." "She had also read..."

"...one report that was completely different from the rest." Oh, the piqued my interest. I want to know about that report.

"Pride will always be a problem to humanity." Preach it, sister!

"Access permitted." she... Capitalize "She." Same thing with the sentence that starts "she flashed..." and "a young man wearing..." "she declared..." "his silver eyes..." "her jaw almost..." and "she accidentally..." I'm going to stop pointing these out now, but just no that the next sentence needs to start with a capital letter.

I like the washing of the legs bit. In Christianity, we have foot washing as a way to show how humility and respect. It is a good analogue.

I suggest putting the sentence "She thought he was a..." and "A very beautiful woman..." together with a comma. The second sentence is an incomplete one without the first sentence.

Wow the whole next section is interesting and confusing at the same time. I like the doubt you create. Why is Awashima so anxious about getting a routine drug? What is that drug, actually? Why does he have to gag her? Wow, what's going on? It is an interesting way to show how out of control Kana is and how she has no idea what's going on as well as the reader.

She may be confused, but she's a smart cookie and I like the way she forces him to confess by threatening to inject him with the "safe" drug.

It is also wonderful that her sticking up to him and defending Awashima has earned her a bit of trust with the rest of the patients. I can see this will be an "us against them" kind of tale. Fascinating.

She has a robot? Wow, fandom blindness strikes again, lol.

I love that final moment of the chess game. I am wondering if he is really playing against someone or if he himself is mental unstable and has a second personality inside his head.

Good job, darling.

OMG Kyaaaa I love this chapter! Finally the explanations really helped me to understand your plot now! :D

YESS Rikuo, make her your bride! Gogogogogo! Kana is so awesome, don't let this type of girl slip from your hands! XD

I hate Sanmoto and Abe no Seimei. They should just shoo shoo! No, Nurarihyon! Leave the poor old man alone dammit! D;

Wait...What? They are all youkai? Not a mentally sick humans? I thought they were.

I do realize you like writing bloody scenes. XD And you wrote your chapters really intense too! But I don't get it? Why are they all living underground, behaving like lunatics and killing one another? Damn this is so epic!

Will Kana and Rikuo fall in love? Btw I really love the strong, gutsy Kana here! :D

Oh. FUCK. HOLY FUCK FUCK FUCK FUCK FUCK.
Rose - you LOVE giving me heart attacks, don't you? ARE YOU TRYING TO FUCKING KILL ME?!
NOOOOOOOOOOOO! Kana - YOU CAN'T BE ENGAGED! You HAVE TO marry Rikuo! I don't know why the hell he wants to make you his bride but you HAVE TO marry him!
Please don't tell me you're engaged to Kiyotsugu . . . .
OH NO! NURARIHYON! What happened to you?
Ah, more characters are coming up! And the fact that they're youkai-EEEEEEEEEEEEPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP! *faints of over-excitement*
SO THE RANKS INDICATED THAT?! Damn, I did not see THAT coming!
So I guess the mystery people mentioned were Kejorou, Kubinashi, Aotabou and Hitotsume?
YANAGIDA! Damn, you can never trust that blond bitch!
XD I love the way Kana blackmailed Goro-kun! So hot, my Kana-chan!
FINALLY! Some RikuKana!

omgg you finally updated!Amazing work as always! I hope rikuo's grandfather is going to be alright. Nexxt chapter pleas it's really intresting! Pleas update puppeteer as well! :3

I love this story, seriously
chapter fantastic
Kana has to be able to release all, I wonder why Rikuo needs a bride

and Nurarihyon is collapsed, Kana save him and gives a kick in the ass to Seimei and Sanmoto

thank you Rose for updated

Thank you for not discontinuing the story! How will they save Nurarihyon? So they are yokai! Great chapter!

- so headmaster Sanmoto is in league with the Porn Star Seimei
"Taku killed someone?" - I think this should be in italic
- no Kana, don't care about him being a killer. Care about the factt hat Sanmoto and the Nue are supporting the killings
- oh good, she quickly realized that :D
- is Sanmoto honest of bluffing?
- "kindness that emits nothing but evil" eh? XD
- Kana, don't go trusting Sanmoto's lover!
- oh, she is engaged? Or is she just bluffing?
- that coffee was probably poisoned
- knew that grandpa's words were a Death Flag...
- so the chapter was divided... I see, so you still resist my corruption fufufu...

This is a great chapter so I doubt anyone is disappointed in it