You do know that Bellatrix Lestrange is actually Bellatrix black and that she is a cousin to Sirius black right?

This story is incoherent and inconsistent. It’s as if the author forgets what he writes from chapter to chapter or in some cases paragraph to paragraph.

It’s also clearly a self insert and Harry is a Mary Sue.
A mermaid made a pass at him when he was in his early teens? That pathetically ludicrous.

cool story, just a few inconsistencies but I won't list them all. I think the majour one I noticed at the end was Dumbledore's reliance that Tom would kill Harry yet he knew Tom was innocent and under imperius by himself. Also Umbridge and Fudge's sentences seemed a small bit over the top. Fudge did horrible things worthy of a life sentence but Umbridg's crimes aren't shown, just a little OTT to give a three hundred something life sentence. Still when one looks past the mistakes that everybody makes it is a great story,

so your stories confuse me sometimes they were sad and crying and saying they should have treated him better when he left why they didn't have to pretend for anyone at that time and here you portray them as monsters

A woman who was in slytherin and think poorly of parseltongue ? Sure... That sounds logical !

Great story

I wish you had a chapter for a epilogue but over all its a fair book not the best there was a couple mistakes and some confusion.

Well, Harry did warn the weasel- it's what i call Ron, i never personally liked him for- reasons which i'd like to keep to myself- Harry did warn the weasel 2 times, and well he didn't back off so Harry was in his rights to call the weasel to a duel, and that's all i'm gonna say i like your stories, til then.

well that was interesting to say the least especially since Dumbledore was a rapist I've never readnthat before I've read good manipulative and good but made mistakes Dumbledore never rapist Dumbledore and Lily and James potter being abusive was another new thing for me but if they got raped that much I can see them go dark like that anywho loved the story

Lol what a chapter I love astoria

I couldn't take anymore after the Okay bozo time to dance... I just... Good idea, bad execution.

Thank you for writing this story I quite enjoyed it.

what the fuck is going on here?

And your friends with benefits the closest.

Shots fired.