continue

fuck the critics and just continue the story mate this a very unorthodox story all ready just continue it and good luck

for f*ck sake, get a beta, if you remove all the grammar nonsense the story will be 10x better

I guess my real gripe with this one ahs to come down to the OC's. For different reasons:
Kali: I find her unberable. On top of the fact that she always win, no matter what, nothing stops her, she encounters no obstacles, evrything she does is the bestest and so on. Kinda makes her unlikable. On top of that she has this compulsory need to prove that evrything else is inferior that totally makes her a pain to read.
Zhao, Azula, Mei e: those three have problems of her own. Outside of shooting and throwing granades, they don't have much going on in term of actual characters. Zhao seems to exist only to bang Lilith, Azula is lesbian and thats it, Mei literally disappears after a a while... not like she had much going on anywai.
Lilith: the only one i liked reading. Strong enough to kick ass, without being the "i win" button that Kali is. Has an actual character unlike the others, and does more than shooting and saying a line evry now and then. I can see that behiond Kali, this is the only OC that you put some real tought into.

Korra characters are quite spot on. I don't mind Korra being criticised, hek thats what you're supposed to do, since for the first two books, she was an incredibly flawed character. You just made her progress happen faster. Is generally nicer seeing the Avatar characters struggle to adapt to the changing world, since the OC part is dominated by Kali and showing of awesome she is. I guess you were going to make parts reverse in the inevitable Bloodthirster fight (since considering the tecnological level and what you said about the new Avatar state, Korra is their only logical hope they have to get out alive) but i guess we'll never know.

Review: Pros: Has some good realism in someways, really ramps up the things to the heights WH40K allows. Does grimdark well. Quality plot. Good pace. While i have written more cons, i can easily see this being a favorite of people who don't care about the constant edgelordly grimdarkness.

Cons: Nearly constant edgelordy grimdarkness. Feels like a lot of anime in that. The writer often goes out of the way to put it a lot of places it doesn't belong, realism hole. Though the writer does well of keep it completely out of some characters. But the light relaxing world of Avatar is barely present (which is why i was looking for these crossovers... Ooops). The story is unfinished, but it didn't feel like an issue for me. Still worth it if you like the story. Bad grammar, but not an issue for me. Some realism issues.

Damn, but the Kyoshi bit was all but ludicrously accurate. If they can’t handle Azula, they’ll fold like cafeteria pizza to any sort of decent mid-1800s-onwards firearm, to say nothing of ripoff Imperial autoguns.

Roboute was poisoned with Warp energy and his regeneration was inhibited,because a simple slashed throat is a papercut for a primarch (easily healed and forgotten).

I really like your juxtaposition between the 40k setting and the Legend of Korra setting, I feel that you are doing an amazing job of showcasing just how utterly different the 40k setting is for anything else. You really do encompass that feeling of awesomeness that 40k brings to the table of any genre. In short, I love your work and hope you continue it.

Please update

Are you going to update? Please?

I wanna read this, but do you even grammar?

This is an excellent story; despite the seeming inability of these two universes to mesh, you've managed to do that nearly perfectly. I am very satisfied having read through your work and

more please

It's allliiivvveeee!

Thanks for the update. )

Yay o am very happy that you are updating I really like this