Beautiful! It made me cry but I really loved it a lot. Well written, just a few mistakes; but we all make those! So do not worry about it! I am in love with this story! Good job!

Some people really don't give France credit for all of the angst and tragedy he's got to go through ;_; I mean there was Davie for America and that was sad for his own right... But I feel somehow seeing someone again like that but... . SO MUCH OF IT.

This was beautiful. And so heartbreaking! It's worse when you're listening to 'All of Me' by John Green (like me).

I loved the feelings you described that France had for Jeanne. So touching!

Well, I wish I could elaborate more on this review if mine, but sadly, I am tired. So I'll just follow you and expect more wonderful fics from you!

With love,
Amy

Hi there :) I wanted to repay the favor for your kind reviews on my stories, they really make me smile! Unfortunately, I am completely canon-blind, but I shall do my best for you. Anyways, ONWARD!

I like this opening definition of the sensation of falling in love. I don't know if this is a canon thing or not, but I like it all the same. (Actually, now that I've read over the rest of the story, I'm thinking that's not a canon thing and I commend you on the creativity of these different definitions).

[So this is what falling in love feels like] - I'm wondering if this is a thought from France? If it is, it might look better in italics to better separate it from the narrative.

I really like how you pointed out that France knew the difference between LOVE and FALLING IN LOVE. That was a really nice comparison to make.

[She was absolutely beautiful...] - I thought the repition of France's name over and over was a little too much in this short paragraph of sentences, maybe consider mixing it up and using some 'he's?

Dang, France was alone for the hundreds of years after Jeanne died...that's just so sad! :( being without the one you love for a day can sometimes feel like it's tearing you to pieces, much less a hundred years...

[...felt like a weight was lifted off her shoulders...] - I'm wondering if 'her' is meant to be 'his' in this case since you're talking about France?

This was an interesting piece to say the least. I'm glad that France got some kind of closure by spending some time with Lisa; really warms my heart :)

Throughout this piece, I'm sorry to say that I thought the narrative felt a little stiff. There were a lot of instances where comma placement made things sounds unnatural and murky. I would go so far as to say I felt that you overused commas. Maybe if you took a look at this piece again, you could think about rewriting some parts to make them sound clearer?

Otherwise, I enjoyed this piece, thank you so much for writing it. See you around!

Hi - still canon blind :-) But this was a cute little interlude about falling in love.

[reclining on a tree] I had a little difficulty picturing exactly what France is doing here. If he's reclining on the tree he's horizontal, like reclining on a bed. If he's just leaning against it I would go for "reclining against."

I like that you're using action tags interspersed with your dialogue, though in the beginning the movements you describe seemed a little mechanical. I really liked the mention of the "clear sky" which instantly throws light and space over your characters.

[so this is] I'd consider putting character thoughts in standard italics.

[visions of God... sent by God] the double use of "God" here seemed a little repetitive, but your mileage may vary.

I felt that the section after really told us about how France felt rather than showed us, and the framing words you use distance us from him. Consider the difference between the "she was the most wonderful girl" part (which I felt overused "wonderful" and "France knew", with something more immediate like:

"To France, everyone was beautiful, but Jeanne was special. She was the most wonderful person he knew, and he longed for her smiles, her laughter, her bliss."

In the "Jeanne is dead" sequence, be careful too of the telling; I would eliminate sentences dominated by "he" language where possible.

Consider the comma splice and sentence fragment of the "Napoleon and Josephine" section :-)

I am a little confused about the "photograph" conversation with Lisa, not being immediately clear on who took a picture, and why. I'm not familiar with the full significance of John's meeting Lisa there, but I'm pretty sure that's just canon blindness, not a flaw of your writing itself.

I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for writing it xx

Wow...happy belated birthday :)

Good story.