This is great writing overall. However I would have preferred you didn't include Cardin at all tbh.

It's worth mentioning that you're one of the very few writers that can tackle Ruby x Juane and actually do it well. You've kept them almost perfectly in-character and created an interesting character conflict to write the story around. Which most people fail to do for Ruby which is why their stories end up sucking.

Wonderful story. Cute and humorous.

The bonus story was great! Never mess with Yang's hair.

I THINK YANG NEEDS TO STOP SMIRKING LAUGHING GRINNING I COULD OF SAID SOMETHING UGH MAKES ME MAD CHANGE IT CCCCCCAAAAAAANNNNNNNGGGGGEEEEE IIIIITTTTTT NNNNNOOOOOWWWW RRRRRIIIIIGGGGGHHHHTTTT NNNNOOOOOWWWW! I hate this soo very much change it...

I'm trying not to laugh in class!

This was just icing on the cake my friend, just icing on the cake.

Oh this was so fricking adorable.

I enjoyed this chapter; Cardin is a bit of a jerk, but not a total asshole, so that's great. Lancaster (that's what Ruby/Jaune is called now) fics are almost always a good read, and this is no exception!

Though isn't Coco leader of Team CFVY?

And with that, the story comes to a satisfying end.

WAY TO GO, YANG! KICK THEIR ASSES!
WOOOOOO!

#ahem#
Love the story.
Keep up the good work.

HAHAHAHAHAHA! That was awesome!

Great story. Short, sweet and detailed. Loved it!

Nice Job!

LONG LIVE JAUNE!
LONG LIVE RUBY!
LONG LIVE RWBY!

i believe this would have been a great story if not for the use of Oum instead of God, it says in the anime they say God

Ermahgerd that was adorable. Slam awkward and awkward together and you get cute I suppose!
Well done!

Okay, just another review. I noticed in a lot of your dialoge that you tend to add periods at the end of quotes where you should use commas.
Incorrect: "She REALLY likes her hair." Replied the middle girl...
Correct: "She REALLY likes her hair," replied the middle girl...
Other than that, a couple mispells or forgotten letters, which I'm sure are fixable but not necessary to go back and correct (just double check your writing before you publish or have a friend read over?)

Also, to be honest, I'm kind of in the same boat as Yang. I love my hair enough to go on a rampage like that if someone cut it shorter than I want. Or dying it

Okay, first off, the fact you named Velvet's weapon Thumper was amazing.

Props on the well written and highly entertaining fic, you really brought the characters to life. I have a think for RoseArc ships, and while that was great, I think your strongest point here was the budding friendship or camaraderie seen between Velvet and Cardin; it's not something you see in every fic, how those two specifically act around each other since Forever Fall. Too many people just hurry and write about Cardin pining after Jaune or some other stuff that just seems like a wish fulfillment rather than character developement.

You could always go back and update the fight scene when all of team CFVY is revealed.
Thank you for writing this hilarious stuff.
Keep Writing