can't for the next chapter in this story

"Mommy i am so glad to finally meet you!"

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STOP! STOP! ABORT MISSION! YOU'RE GOING TOO FAR! REIN IT IN! SOS! SOS! HELP MY BOY DANNY!

Oh my god... I think I'm dying.

Anyway. This is a good story, though grammar and generally how you've been wording things, as well as people speech patterns can be improved. So dialogue and thought is what you need to improve. The storyline is amazing, but take a few opportunities to build the world.

Aw dude really you killed Barbara? She is the coolest character!

Right off the bat you surprise me this chapter

Paulina crushing on Danny. Danny's mentioned what he thought of Paulina to Valerie
I totally missed. But again is causing interesting dilemma Paulina basically expects to bend everyone to will

From at this point it's been at least 2 to 3 years in the high school she pretty much burned any credibility
she has

I'm always glad to see the politics of the a listers in stories the always make absolutely nobody sense to me
like how you become an A-list or how you kicked off and why some are not.

Like it was clear to me personally why Valerie was kicked. The reason they give always seem kind of weak to me
technically she's smart she's tough super athletic. Valerie technically the female version of dash
and she has brains unlike dash. And Kevin just because he dating Sam he gets kicked. That makes very little
sense either

Speaking of sense the hell does Paulina have against Sam anyways? Much of can tell Sam is never done anything
to Paulina the justify such hostility? I've seen Sam counterattack but she's never been the initial instigator
and why is Paulina so hung up on bad mouthing certain people like Sam and Danny and Tucker.

Like Sam alone anyway I cut it in any other school in the face of the earth she be a popular girl.

Thankfully Paulina is finally forced to put the money where mouth is. Personally I think the only reason her ass
hasn't been kicked is a corrupt social system of school. And star star has a reputation of being the super nice
levelheaded girl. To my theory the brains behind Paulina's kingdom. I think Paulina was left on her
own she be destroyed

Thank you made something great in this chapter by the way I read it using the star still friends with Valerie
and you made a ton of character development will start such little effort. When she states she doesn't care the
hierarchy of the a listers survives. It is made it clear given the changes we saw last chapter that she
thinks the writings on the wall for the a listers. By the same time show star isn't above the ideology
a friend to other people negatively. I don't think star even realizes she referred to another student as a
freak. It's a tough question of stars being a lesser jerk to to be influenced by people around her
that she is a full on jerk like Paulina

Either way you chapter she shows great character development for dash Paulina star

Watching Paulina crash and burn was so much fun to watch, ironically it shows Danny's growth as a person and
he realizes he's used to crush on Paulina like everyone else but then grew out of it.
Is just the initial maturity it Danny showed here at all the other crap she's pulled the last couple years
not just on Danny put on his friends Tucker Sam Valerie. I'm not sure Paulina ever took a shot at jazz but
I wouldn't put it past her bottom line Paulina destroyed bridge before she could even get to it

Wow I think we should have star check to see if she psychic. Because of one fell swoop the announcement
from the school boss. She basically shut down the a listers and call them out in the bad grades
no I think they got away of it in the past, he probably had people like jazz pumping up the overall
curve by being super excellent. But jazz probably graduated by this point so that's out
between the question how come jazz is never on the a listers? I mean technically she met most of the criteria's
she was smart attractive knowledgeable popular and in a way rich. I mean think about it the Fenton's
technically have some money. How else could they cover up for some of the stuff they've done like
Jack's driving

I also noticed that most of estimate or hitting at the think Sam's responsible for the crackdown
to be excellent to see someone else responsible. Probably some kid in the back room
the no one seemed to notice that happen to be record everything on a cell phone all the time.

No just struck me the Casper high has an open LGBT community, you mentioned both of Paulina and
Harley's strutting their stuff no one was the least bit concerned with lesbians showing open interest
in both of them. As for as for Harley Quinn unless Paulina actually knows you taught her a lesson get
the message

Really Paulina you going to go all super villain against Harley Quinn that's not good and well

Harley Quinn as school psychologist that might be a problem, given the performance she's done
today how effective will she be half the population lusting after

Also really people in charge did not know who the regular ghost town are. Especially the last
psychologist was a ghost. Long-term Harley could probably take the job either she does 2 things
wait until Danny graduates or he turns 18. She can also go straightforward approach
until the ones that offered her the job was between her and Danny. A course we don't have
the 2 would approach this information. All the scene of the bosses here and be all right
Harley's and Danny's relationship

Well Sam's lesson skill here and soldiering is quite right. The battlefield was a changing
place even a veteran can be caught off guard if there for a moment and lose

Heck I been thinking of doing a military story I might just borrow that insight for the training
session

Either way is probably the best use of seen Sam with plant-based powers ever. It's also the most
logical progression of those powers. I mean seriously to use plants Sam has to know plants
which means studying them. The only other story that had unique training session for Sam having
plant powers had a learned regeneration. A course at the time to fill in and captured her is
currently torturing her body parts. Which Sam would reattach or regrow using plant powers

I'm not usually one for masquerades or musical numbers. In principle I like both I find it
really hard to find anything that actually like. This one's pretty good

I'm not sure about the dancing and laughing thing, I think it's more of just timing and placement
I think it has to do more with kids in either high school or college being in mature. But Danny
showed here in an adult situation if you're actually good is not going to happen

Great cameo from the fruit loop

Also nice cliffhanger, that particular Phantom villain should've got a 2nd appearance
could also be a great way of showing team Phantom's growth. Both in character and powers

We shall see

Wow it's been a while

I just realized them behind in the few reviews
which is ironic given how I help bring the story into existence
which is the life been hectic, anyone read profiles see a bit of what's been going on with me in my own

Anyways on the review

Well we meet miss competent boss at the school board. Which makes me wonder something where the hell of
you been up until now?

I mean seriously

And as I mentioned in my other review Sam the kind of miss the point. So he was using Sam's a hypocrite or
ineffective problem is show never bothered writing situation the school one way or another
if the had written an actual episode showing how Sam had dealt with not dealt with and we have
something to work with. Personally a they never thought of it be like there were 2 groups of writers
1 wrote school situation and the other wrote Sam background. In reality they should somehow compared to 2

Okay about another question as well how come Sam never called in the powerful school official to
fix things earlier

Or they come up with the Sam didn't think of it or maybe a form of foolish pride lastly could be Sam was afraid
of breaking the snitch policy free to say the fallout that her Tucker Danny might face

Be honest goes back to my previous statement the writer's original show never covered it. So we can't blame Sam
one way or another because well they never wrote the character to deal with it

The kind of roads as a given the corruption and the bullying at school.

Wow dash just claimed that Danny cheated and is forced to redo part of the test again the also mentioned that
Paulina was doing keeping score. They blatantly said that she's incompetent is a good chance she screwed it up
course given Danny's previous grades they had to be a little skeptical like a student going from being a d
average suddenly getting an a

Bring up the Valerie strong the girls no surprise there, but Paulina actually beating Sam I find that kind of
hard to believe. Between Sam's workout regiment and ghost fighting. I she's not closer to Valerie's range

I mean I could see one part of the test Paulina beating Sam but in every part of it.
Sorry I just don't see Paulina as athletic enough to be someone like Sam. Sam's been doing some of the
same ghost adventures as Valerie. Just for the state of survival Sam would have to be in shape
makes sense she's not as good as Valerie who trained like a special forces soldier

I find it hard to the beauty queen that Paulina only does cheerleading be better than Sam
fitness. Last I checked the cheer squad Casper high is not middle to mad dogs

(A smile for you to get the reference)

Wow Sam's grandmother the school boss and Harley know each other. Oddly enough the 3 adults it could actually
fix things that were wrong with the school. Makes you wonder why they all sat idle until now?

Also really Harley's outfit compared to what Harley could wear that's probably conservative
but again Harley likes push some buttons

Okay one question was answered here Sam's grandmother's motivation, she was letting Sam stumble
a bit so she could grow as a person. This technique you should do when children become preteens and teenagers
I'm not saying you can do what the hell they want given the opportunity make some decisions and grow as a person
if you don't know never learn to grow up

As for dash I see his downfall, he's always taken pride is the strongest and fastest because of a natural
twist of fate. Forgot that eventually are the people about natural talent and be able to train
and if he doesn't work and what he has developed that will rot away.

We shall see

Thanks for the chapter and please keep up the good work (-) I'm really excited for joker getting to amity park

Okay like the concept but felt it would've been cooler if danny and Harley got mixed up in a lot of the marvel verses instead of staying at the ghost central with villains keep heading there. But please tell me for the love of fandom that Joker didn't really kill batgirl?

Well that was a intense chapter, things are about to get rougher for Danny and Harley. I don't know how Harley will react when she sees the Joker again, but I can guess Danny's. In my head, it involves punching him in the teeth.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Things are getting good!
I am loving this story, never once did I think of shipping Danny with Harley of all people, and you know what they are definitley a great couple!
Oh I wish to see more of Danley? HarlDan? not good with ship names but one hell of a pairing!
Hope to see a new chapter some day! Good LUCK!

you did a chapters 2x

This was awesome, please continue

Loved the demise of Undergrowth. Pam actually did betray them. Danny, however, did what needed to be done by destroying Undergrowth. He would've regrown, stronger, more cunning than ever, and if he had it would either take an uneasy team-up, or Danny becoming Dan Phantom by his own choosing otherwise the plant man would win. Kwan's going to be upset if he learns the stuff Sam said when under Undergrowth's control.

love it

I really miss this story soo much!

I hope when either Harley sees joker or Danny does and tells Harley about it they, I mean Harley, has the common sense to call Batman or nightwing. but I am loving this story and all the action that's been happening I just really hope for some more romance soon before the joker encounters begin.