Story looks like it could be good, but imma be real your english is either spotty or you are switching pronouns on purpose and it makes it hard to read when shepard flips multiple times in 1 paragraph yet alone in 1 chapter. Futas are usually considered she/her, if you want to switch it to he/him its fine, idc, but pick one and stay with it.

Loved this stories I found it at chapter 30 and have been with it ever since and it was great. With it finished I can't wait to see your next big story

Where is Miranda? She is hardly ever mentioned in past many chapters...birth, brief mentions during clone issue, and that was about it. Bring her back. She is the one Shep truly loves (which is different from the others she uses) and of course has a kid now. She needs a much bigger role rather than absent girlfriend who is mother of shep's kid.

with the alpha of below zero i was expecting a reference at least and wasn't disappointed nice chapter

Happy Early Marry Christmas

Got it. Hope you have a good christmas pal.

Love

All in all the clone is getting a good deal getting to be her own person. And not just a copy.

Brook is going to be Kira's personal baby boomer sounds good all the kids would have tanned skin and be both smart and resourceful. Kira knows quality when she sees it.

I hope she isn't hard on the clone she was manipulated and used. But if she's close to the real thing she will make an excellent leader and soldier.

Brooks maybe a pet for one of the slaves or Kira's personal baby maker.

Still great chapter.

you use he/she on Shepard this confuses a lot.

glad to have seen the comments on hf for this story love this series

This would be greatly encouraged in questionable questing

Did you proof read this at all? There are many mistakes, several misspelled words that are obvious and many times where you refer to Shepard with the wrong pronouns, I.e. "he" "him" "himself".

This is the first chapter of this story that people read, as such it leaves an impression on them and decides whether or not they continue to read this. I'm going to speed forward to the latest chapter and check the grammar etc. If it isn't improved I know not to bother reading this story through.
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OK just read the latest chapter and I'm not impressed, still a lot of mistakes that are fairly obvious. Please get a beta reader and have them go over everything that you've already written, starting from chapter 1. ffs you definitely need it.

I know you warned about the cliffhanger but still lol. Dont leave us fans on them too many times bud. XD
Anyway great chapter as always. And from how you left it, curious on how things would play out from there.

Huh. Interesting update. Wasnt exactly expecting what happened but good chapter non the less. :)