What a refreshing little fic to read at 8 am. I really liked this it was really cute and, as much as I hated chemistry, I liked how you incorporated that. It added a nice touch.

Okay, and, let's be honest, I'd be low key happy if you wrote the smut. I love it, guilty as charged.

lol I didn't peg you to be the type to write Ikari smut but I'd read and review it anyway xD

Okay so hey I see that your writing style's shifted! Or at least for this fic/one-shots. (I don't know if it's just me, but my one-shot voice is 10x dreamier than my multi-chap voice lol.) A few points about it, though:
1. On parts where you are listing, try to avoid things that are redundant. For ex. Dawn Berlitz is smiles and sunshine and everything good and happy. The general idea here positivity, but either smiles or sunshine can symbolize all of those ideas by itself. So add other ideas-passion, laughter, breezes, easygoingness, etc.
2. There are some bits that I feel don't flow. Ex. So everyone must have seen their relationship coming because that's what the red string of fate had already decided. I get it, but mentioning the red string seems sorta awkwardly random, especially since we were just talking about pos/neg attractions.
ex. desperate for a gasp of air but never actually getting it. The word "actually" broke the flow for me there as it's just a) unnecessary and b) wordy.
There are other parts throughout the fic similar to the two aforementioned parts, but mostly it comes down to asking yourself whether or not this extra part is really necessary. If you read through something and question it in the first place, chances are, you don't need it.

Now to substance!

I liked the sciencey parallels to, you know, the more romantic and less easily explained emotions. It's a worthwhile idea, and you came up with good examples.
That said, the ending of the colors one fell a little flat to me. I was hoping you'd expand on the third to last paragraph because I live for sweet yet unconventional reasoning. Even if you didn't, the second to last paragraph felt like a really far, unrelated jump, and I wished there was a bridge to explain exactly how or why they worked. I immediately thought of the whole concept of colors we can't see and how Paul could maybe be one of them, and "yes, Dawn only had three cones in her eyes to see a million colors like everyone else, but sometimes, she saw Paul as an impossible color that she could only describe as mellow-or, at the very least, sweet enough to pair just fine with her own colors and" ramble ramble
I wish we had been giving more real-life examples of why Paul and Dawn are such opposites and why them being together is "dangerous", "thrilling", etc. It didn't have to be long-winded stories, but sentence-long memories to just give them and their relationship substance beyond a small makeout session would have been good.

Anyway, as always, take my criticism & suggestions with a grains of salt. :P It's a solid story, and I like it. And I'd be up for seeing how you handle smut hahaha. Keep writing, Sissy 8)

Yours,
Aph

that was really beautiful 3 and ps you should definitely go for the ikari smut it we be awesome in your style of writing :)

Ermaghersh that was absolutely positively beautiful. I'm not kidding you, either. I'm not the hugest fan of Ikarishipping (I like it but I don't LOVE it) and I admit that I was a little hesitant to read this because I've never read an Ikari one-shot but this is you here so I knew I had to and I'm so fucking glad I did because this was perfect in all ways. I loved how you centered it around chemistry (the science kind and the relationship kind c;) and the laws of the earth and just shit I'm so happy I read this. Its perfect, I promise. Please keep it on ffn, I'm in love. :D

so yeah you just made me like this pairing a little more, so thank you for that. Your writing was as perfect as ever (although I think I did see a little typo in the second scene, but I could be wrong) and ugh you're just fantabulous. Yea, that's how ill start describing you. Fantabulous.

and yes ajdbdjhr after reading this I'd definitely read an Ikari lemon XD do it, do it, dooooo it. :p

again, you did a perfect job! I hope to see more from you soon! (and I promise I'll get to your pm soon I PROMISE)

Love you, Sissy!

-CeeCee

Ending was so good! Oh I'll read the ikari lemon when it's out definitely I like scenes like that since it's still a moment of love per say like basically a moment of passion and lust eh. But I really like how you compared and contrast in this fic it pretty much explain ikarishipping hehehe anyway great story!