At first I kind of enjoyed it, but it became a bit to much I suppose the character tried nothing to either help or change it herself... and I get it I really do I suppose in a way but the way it went with her emotions everywhere...I it was ok I’ll be reading the rewritten one I think maybe seeing if it’s better?

I'm going to read your second try. I'm sure it will be better! Many kisses!

Oh man. Loved it.

She's a wreck. She broke down DURING a mission and look what that got her teammate.

"Don't shame me anymore?" She shames herself. She puts in on herself to try and change the plot, to try and save Rin. But how can she do that when she's a mess herself. Her attitude and composure will be what kills her on the battlefield. It would get a teammate killed too, when they try to save her sorry ass. She IS pathetic

Actually Akihiko did have a right to blow up at her. She doesn't take her training and survival during wartime seriously. She's literally in the way of her team. She's the burden and she doesn't do enough to try and change that

To be honest, I see his point. She doesn't seem like she works hard AT ALL. She looks at Minato doing Fuinjutsu and call in hack, says it magic. But does she ever put the time and dedication into actually mastering something? She tries and control everything and everyone around so that the world in her little bubble can stay perfect. She needs that dose of reality. Life is different to the world she knew before. Hell, the damn world is different. Adapt or die.

So minato is suprised by her when she says that a ninjutsus name shouldn't matter as long as it was effective but someone she isn't as smart as a kid in the academy who is not only smarter then her but better in everyway and this is in a society where precocious children are the norm...so why the hell was minato suspicious of her intellect if so many other children and their mothers are so mature and smart. Doesn't seem like anything to be suprised about. Or could it be that an inconsistency in the story has just occured...at the very beginningg of the story

I think that instead of the fight scene with akihiko, you should focus more on the main character. Thus far shes been as useless as sakura, if not more so considering the duration shes been a genin and the fact that shes a reincarnation. It might be a bit mean to say but it makes me feel like im reading about the reincarnation of someone who was mentally incapable of growing older than 5... The story that is written in a way that is normally used for very personal stories, is extremely impersonal. There is little to no character progression visible. She meets people. but most of the story is about a girl bitching about her doubt and how everyone needs to help her. You'd think she'd be advanced for her age, but in actuallity shes far, far behind the rest.

I think the story would be more fulfilling if there was a strong drive present in the main character to see progress in her abilities, and if she had a bit more mental fortitude and common sense. It would also help to put a lot more in the moment scenes in, to remove the feeling of reading a summerised retelling of a story.

I do like the concept of your story though, especially since I find it weird in naruto that so many clans are practically wiped out and so pureblooded. Take the uchiha as an example. Clan purity or no, politically speaking, uchihas and senjus would have had several marriges between the two when founding the village, resulting in the bloodlines bleeding over. Much like a multicultural city. As such, I really like the fact since you settled on namikaze being a clan in your story, that there are many of them. I never understood why there would be only 1 namikaze in other stories. And I think that this fact that you don't make rediculous claims like these is refreshing and a verypositive thing.

Girl keeps forgetting about Jiraiya orphans and Danzo.

Great chapter! Many kisses!

What. Oh, come on.

Please don't give up on this fic! I know you are probably struggling with the muses at the moment, but I just want to let you know that this story is just TOO GOOD to not have a proper ending.
Good luck!

Hey! I just found this story and I really love it! My favourite part of it is your characterization, especially of Minato. People often write him flat, kind of like a Mary-Sue (is there a male equivalent of that?) or when they try to make him a bit of a bad guy, it comes out of the blue or is unbelievable. I think your interpretation is perfectly realistic, to the point that I personally feel a little betrayed and hood-winked myself!

Suzu is interesting too; you don't often read an SI where the person isn't plotting like a mad person from the beginning. I like that you have her being a child and taking that opportunity to be a kid again.

I also really like the direction of this arc, I'm super interested to see how everything unfolds.

The little blurbs at the beginning of your chapters are fantastic, too; I always go back to read them again after the body of the chapter.

Please update soon, because I'm dying to find out what happens next!

Please update soon this is an amazing story