Sorry for being so late to read this through again! It's really nice to see the friendship between Aziari and Inielowne developing, despite their different personalities. I noticed a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but really that's my fault, I promise to read through it closer next time. XD
Obviously Inielowne will eventually join Aziari on her quest, and I'm really looking forward to finding out what makes her change her mind. This is a really original story with some great characters. :)

A great chapter. I did notice that there were a couple of sentences that appeared to be randomly in italics, which looked a bit odd, but other than that, I have no problems with this one. Inielonwe and Aziari are both great characters, I love the fact that they shunned the stereotypes for their races with their life choices. I'm really interested to learn more about them, and to see what happens next!

This is pretty good so far, and both your individual characters and the plot itself sound very interesting. Though I would like to know how to pronounce the name Inielonwe, haha. She and Aziari have some interesting names, and distinct personalities, too. So far, I’m really liking Aziari (I have a bit of a soft spot for Khajiit), but both of your adventurer OCs are really cool. It was kinda crazy how Ineilonwe killed a man with her bare hands, but that’s just a part of surviving in Skyrim, isn’t it.

If only Inielonwe had realized that man asking for help was a trap; I could tell something was up from a mile away. But she was new to Skyrim, and distracted by her need for gold, I suppose. And if that never happened, she wouldn't have met Aziari.

I’ll have to keep an eye out for the next update, I want to read more about your two adventurers! And I need to find out what was in that room in the first chapter!

-CCM

I've already sent a list of possible improvements via PM (I'm sorry I didn't spot them before!) so now let's get down to talking about all the good things! The plot is great, I'm really interested to find out more about your character, and the organisation that's recruited him. I'm also looking forward to learning about your Dragonborn and finding out why she's disappeared, and meeting the two adventurers who go looking for her. And I can't wait to discover what was in the room...
All in all, you've created an intriguing plot and some interesting characters! I'll try my best to be a good sort-of-beta and I hope this is updated soon! :D

I did see some grammar/spelling errors (the Grammar Nazi in me couldn't not say something) but all in all a good first chapter. Though I am confused as to what this is all about. Obviously I read the summary, but so far we haven't seen the two adventurers... Or at least I hope that animal abusing Altmer isn't one of them. Not only does he seem like a horrible person, but he comes off as a bit of a coward, as well. I hope he gets what's coming to him! MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

That being said, I'm eager for the next chapter... Update soon? *puppy dog eyes*

Oh, and you know SkyFlower51, too?! She kind of beta-read my first Skyrim fan-fiction as well! I'm sure if you tell her about this she'll read it. :)