Sorry for your arm, I've been having the same problem for quite some time now. Everything so far is very good, and I love how you put Shachi and Penguin, cuz people usually use them very little. And they're so cute I really hope you won't let this story go to waste.

That was really interesting. Keep it up, dear!

This is pretty good so far! Please continue with it and update again soon!

Willow's character is highly inconsistent. No person beaten down enough to lose their sense of self and feel they aren't free would have a personality like hers and she definitely wouldn't argue with Law. Your depiction of Law is very ooc and while i expect some oocness in fanfictions, especially with characters like Law in a romance fic, you've ignored some of Law's fundamental characteristics.

Two words and one emoticon...

DAT ENDING :3

The poor girl is rather cheerful in spite being a slave before.
We need to see more of the OC's personality.

Aw cute an sad and a dad like law I love it!

Love it

This is really good! I can't wait for the next chapter! (I'm a sucker for any good LawxOC . And this seems to be one!) x) 3