A sweet insight into the lives of the explorers as well as showing Ned and Veronica further bonding. You show creativity here. Again a nice little vignette.

You have an error where you said that Aggie wasn't much taller than "he." Try "him" there. Or "Ned."

"A cake had been made and the Agatha was drizzled across the top." Try, "Veronica had baked a cake and the name 'Agatha' had been drizzled across the top in red icing."

(Did Vee have enough time to bake this cake after hearing the story?)

Final sentence: add " that" and "had" where you need them. (He had to admit that the old picture had never looked better.)

Otherwise, a really heartwarming story that shows the natures of both Ned and Veronica and pictures them beginning to bond as more of a couple. I like it!