I don't really like how you ignore the fact that Ichigo should be able to see ghosts. As a shinigami, I would expect him to be able to do a tiny bit of his job but you've made him into just a powerful warrior. Not a shinigami.

Bah. What i got from this novel was annoying oc, Pain and his knowledge about spirit from another world that he should't has know, kill all many kage(He look overpowered here), and it took Ichigo much time to defeat both of Oc(Is he really that strong that he can defeat Pain who can kill kage by using his eyes?)And i done. This story not my ideal type story that i love to read...good bye

Honestly sucks that this got abandoned and stuff :/ hope you come back and update this

please continue the stories

This chapter was brilliant. Hinata is free and pissed. Ichigo is ready, and I am wondering... will Kabutomaru betray them right here, right now?

... I kind of like that Kabuto is a 'good guy' in the Boruto timeline... I wonder if this one is... redeemable.

The fights in Naruto: The last, and Boruto: Naruto the movie were epic. I would be inspired by them too I think. Not sure if I was writing at those times or away from it, but definitely was impressed either way. Naruto's... lunar battle was amazing, as well as his fight alongside Sasuke in that first team up between the two in Boruto.

I was surprised you pulled from the Second Shippuden movie, and the female ninja village's arc. It was pretty cool, and now that I think about it... Lee and Shizuka... I ship it. :D

The story is great. I was kind of hoping you'd have someone bring back Naruto using edo-tensei, and have hinata's Shikai awaken during a fight with him, or maybe now have her bankai awaken in that fight, and him tell her, after seeing the love she is developing for Ichigo that he can move on knowing that she found her partner, and the love she had for him gave him the strength to be able to move on... even without Her/Ichigo's using their Zanpakuto... I just remembered that about their swords. Edo tensei would be all but useless against them. Even if Akatsuki got that, they'd stop soon after seeing how 'easily' Ichigo and Hinata said... 'no.' Anyway, been a long time since I have written a review of more than a sentence... that should say something. Well done.

Update soon

So, did Sasuke use Kirin? Because there is no conceivable way that Sasuke drew that Jutsu out from his Chakra pool THEN had enough energy to use Ametrasu. And why the hell isn't Ichigo using his Hollow mask to end this fight?

i cant wait :o

Not bad, not bad, though for some reason this chapter was pretty difficult for me to get through. I'd wager it's because chapters like these you pump out tend to be action-packed and detailed heavy, to the point it doesn't leave anything to the imagination. Now, don't get me wrong. Detail can be a good thing. However, too much of it can leave you running the risk of overwhelming or boring your readers. It gets a little dry after a bit.

I'll start with the good and go from there. I loved Shinno's reveal as a bad guy. I thought that was your intentional from the beginning to tell you the truth. You seemed to be driving home the fact something was off by "Shin's" supposed heroism with the cliched "rescue kid from a burning house" scene but that could just me though. Although, even Shinno's persona was glaringly close to his actual name; that being "Shin" without the "No". *Shrugs.*

Regardless, his betrayal was handled expertly, I felt. The delivery was absolutely beautiful. Readers can really feel sorry for our heroes for falling for this despicable man's ploy. He played the part of a benevolent doctor and desperate master so well that I almost fell for it for a couple of times. His betrayal will provide Ichigo with some much needed character development. Deception is something he's rarely had to deal with before, especially of this nature. The Fullbringers played the part of wanting to "help" him regain his powers and Shinno played the part of needing help; two very distinct ways of deceiving him so it's easy to understand why Ichigo walked blindly into Shinno's trap, or would've if it weren't for the brilliant K-7 (I love him)

That, and he is like Naruto, what with both being typical Shounen heroes. They're all naive and trusting to a fault. At least now you have all the reasoning to make Ichigo a little more cynical and suspicious of strangers.

Now for the bad...

I'm conflicted on your decision to include filler-villains like Fuka into this. On 1 hand, I do appreciate that you're giving the other characters fights of their own, but on the other, I really don't want to read several long, drawn-out, overly-detailed fights, and something tells me you're heading in the same direction of Sasuke vs Ichigo; that being having numerous chapters dedicated to dragged-out fight scenes. That's all well and good for the first couple of chapters to build suspense but after a while, you really ought to move away from them otherwise you run the risk of watering down the intensity of a drawn-out fight and causing the reader's interest to wane.

Sometimes you just need a good old-fashioned anticlimactic curb-stomp. It offers variety. I direct you to an amazingly-written OC-centred DC story written by Kenchi618, where his main character, Max/Null (Null being his persona) fought two fights in the latest chapter, in which he quickly and decisively dispatched his opponents, especially the first one. He saw that he had a direct advantage over him (being that he controls anything metallic and his opponent was wearing a suit of metal armour) so he immediately one-shot him by hurling out of a ten-story building, and it was beautiful. The fic's titled "Less than Zero." Check it out or any of his works, really. You could honestly grow and improve from studying the way Kenchi structures and paces his fight scenes, knowing when to end them without dragging them out for the sake of it.

I will give the chapter's rating a 7.5 out of 10 overall, even if it ultimately wasn't my cup of tea. Grammar was still consistent if nothing else and Kabuto's bait-and-switch tactic was masterfully pulled off, foreshadowed expertly in the previous chapter of someone putting Ichigo to sleep. I will give this story two more chapters (if I can trudge through them) before deciding whether or not to drop the story.

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Whoa. What happened? The quality dropped dramatically. The last couple of chapters we got were beautiful, nicely paced training segments and touching moments of Ichigo and Hinata bonding. In exchange for that we get a terribly dragged out fight between Obito and a lackey with gratuitous Japanese translations. The fight was both an utter bore and horribly irritating. I'm not Japanese. You're not writing for a Japanese audience, so when you put a jutsu like Karin's in Japanese you just confuse the hell out of your readers. You can provide a detailed description, for sure, but they would have a greater understanding of it if it was in their native tongue.

I do recommend laying off the Japanese translations for techniques. It gives your story a very pretentious, "pseudo-authentic" feel about it. Like, you're trying too hard to make your story feel authentic by throwing in Japanese translations expecting your readers to understand. It doesn't help. If anything, it hinders the reader's enjoyment since he/she has to stop what they're doing, open google and search for the English translation to understand what the fuck you're using. See what I mean? You're just breaking immersion. I shouldn't have to keep a translator on hand while reading a story. There's nothing worse about reading than being aware that you ARE reading. I should be feeling lost in the enjoyment of reading a high-quality fic, not constantly pulled out of it to search for English translations that should've been used in the first place.

This could've easily been avoided had you at least put the English translations for the Jutsus in brackets right next to them. Putting them at the end of the chapter doesn't cut it. It's still breaking immersion. I have to scroll to the end of the chapter, potentially spoiling myself, just to find out what you're using. On that note, the English translations weren't even at the end of this chapter! You forgot to put them entirely, so what's going on? What a frustrating chapter.

I'm highly disappointed in your use of Hidan. I'm not sure why you opted to bring him back either. He's one of the most uninteresting Akatsuki members that the Naruto author ever created. No, he was the most uninteresting and easily the weakest of the Akatsuki, period! He's a one trick pony. I really don't see why Obito would bother bringing him back and I can only hope you kill him off real soon. His presence dragged down this chapter immensely. He's just an irritating character with a very uninteresting power. (He can't die, boring) I do get what you were going for in having Obito play the straight man to Hidan's idiot but it just felt forced. Making Hidan highly irritating for the sake of a few laughs in a desperate attempt to lighten up the chapter. Since I don't care for either character the way I do for Hinata and Ichigo, their jokes just fell flat.

Now, this isn't to say it was all doom and gloom. There were some bright spots that I absolutely loved. For instance, I loved the backstory behind Karin's and Sasuke's relationship, even if it's only sexual. It lends a lot more believability to Sasuke as a character that he's willing to open up, even if it's only for sexual release. His claim of her here was extremely well-written, feeling entirely natural. Right before the Hidan and Madara stuff, this chapter was the bomb just for those two plus Jugo alone. It was great to finally see Sasuke's subtle reactions to his defeat to the "reaper."

He didn't need to vocalize his irritation. His actions spoke far louder than words could. Pushing himself intensely for the whole week following his loss, readers can fully understand just how livid he is with himself for not being strong enough to put down Ichigo. His training sequences with his clones was also badass, especially the part where he cut through his clone's Susanoo with just his sword. That was awesome. I also liked Karin's wariness of Jugo. It sets tension. Will she plot to rid Sasuke of his burden or will she just get used to him? We don't know, but the suspense you've created between them is fascinating.

I also liked Karin winking at her own reflection in the mirror. It's subtle but it shows she's narcissistic without you needing to spill it out.

Heh-heh. Ichigo compared his comrades to monkeys. That was an amusing line. They can't help but act on their natural shinobi instincts, but it's only natural that Ichigo would find them to be weird. You were also consistent with the K-7-tension. I particularly liked the mention of him staying out of the conversation with the good doc and speaking when spoken to, showing his detachment from the group.

The end of the chapter was also very suspenseful. Who is that guy and what is he doing with Ichigo? Mystery and intrigue evoked beautifully.

The rating for this chapter will be a 7 out of 10. While the start and the end redeemed the chapter to a degree I felt the middle was just too drawn out. Also, having to search for translations to understand what you were using pulled me out of immersion which lowered my enjoyment of the chapter overall.

7/10

OMG! I loved this chapter. I recall back when I first read this one I was little put-off by how easily Ichigo seemingly caved to Hinata's demands at the beginning of this wonderful chapter, thinking it was everyone ganging up on Ichigo to interrogate his sorry-ass (for some reason). Only now on my second read through do I truly appreciate how well that scene played out. It was really only Hinata who was pushy, but considering the circumstances surrounding her situation of there being two of her, her assertive demands were more than perfectly understandable. I think why I'm more appreciative of the direction you went with to flesh out Hinata's Shinigami state is that it kept the characters feeling alive and not just microphones utilized to explain the mechanics behind her new state.

A lot of authors make the mistake of speaking through a character when exposition is needed. Here, I never felt that. Everyone felt like they should being who they were in their respective series. The decision to have Zangetsu explain Hinata's new state of being and inform her she had to reach out to her own Zanpakuto if she wanted to make her newfound powers her own was logical and an absolute blessing. He has the patience and intelligence that Ichigo lacks, (not to say that Ichigo's a dumbass by any stretch of the imagination, because he isn't) so it only makes perfect sense that he would be the one to fill in the details, and I liked it. I especially adored everyone's reactions to the materialization of Ichigo's Zanpakuto, especially Moegi's and Hinata's. ("You know my name!" She was adorable) Zangetsu's assessment of Moegi being the glue that holds the team together was awesome because it lends an aura of importance to her.

Oh, the old tried-and-true ghostly materializations of a character's loved ones straightening their resolve. What would you call that troupe? Never mind. I love it. It's sweet and touching, reminding the readers just how important the materialized spirits were to the character imagining them. It's honestly perfect. It shows just how much of an impact Neji and Naruto made on Hinata and how closely she values them for her to suddenly recall them as she sharpened her resolve needed to press on and master the power granted upon her.

The training was a lot of fun and most of all, consistent with Ichigo's, perfectly paced and equal in quality. I enjoyed the comparisons between Shunpo and Shunshin, feeling they were right on the money. Shunshin was not so easily employed by everyone the way Shunpo was in Bleach, because it gives the user's tunnel vision and eats away at their Chakra and Stamina. Whereas Shunpo's pretty easily utilized. Ichigo's appraisal was spot on I felt.

"Even if I can't become a Shinigami like Hinata, maybe I can learn something from their way of fighting. That way I get stronger along with everyone else, even be equals with Kabuto!" I love this line! Mostly because it tells us, the readers, something new about Moegi without the need of hammering it down our throats. It's that subtlety that adds nuance to a character and you've nailed it. Moegi's passionate about not falling behind while developing an adorable blossoming crush on K-7 is evident here. I love what you're doing with her, and K-7 too. That little line of his, expertly woven in to keep the readers guessing. We don't know if he's really one of the good guys or whether he just plans on stabbing them in the backs once he's gathered enough intel on Ichigo and his abilities, and it's fascinating. Very reminiscent of Kabuto's earlier ambiguous relationship with Orochimaru, back in the days of the glory days of Naruto, part one.

You were never sure what he was thinking back then. Would he remain loyal to Orochimaru or he was just using him for his own means? There's a scene of Orochimaru and Kabuto in the Chunin Exam that captures this perfectly, after Orochimaru marked Sasuke. Orochimaru even tells Kabuto of his desire to stop him, to which Kabuto gives him a nervous smile before Shunshin-ing away. It set the mood greatly. Then somewhere along the road in part two this, along with Kabuto, gets chucked out the window as Kabuto reverts to the regular Naruto villain status (sob story, boo hoo). It's nice to see that dynamic again here. It reminds me, "Hey, this series was once okay," and that's always a good sign in my book; when a fic can evoke happy nostalgic feelings for a series I've long since hated from me.

Hahahaha. I loved the backfire of Ichigo's attempt at kido and his impatient demands to Hinata to fix his arms. Comedy injected at just the right moments. A training arc, no matter how interesting or well written is by itself, by and large, boring, since the plot needs to draw to a halt so our heroes can strengthen themselves for the battles ahead so they don't need to be plot-armoured to survive. How to bypass that problem? Inject comedy to lighten the otherwise dull atmosphere. And it wasn't just mindless slapstick either (like insert guy pissing off girl and getting pummelled by said girl as a result here) Nope. The jokes here were firmly rooted in Ichigo and Hinata's characters (special shout out to Zangetsu's little barb at Ichigo too), which just made them all the more sweeter since we as the audience can really feel them grow closer reading them being so comfortable around each other that they can be a little silly in each other's presence.

It's too bad Rukia isn't here to be Hinata's kido teacher. Hinata would probably be a pro at kido since she has such good control, as evident by her being a practitioner of the gentle fist.

Heh-heh. Konohamaru bringing it back with the sexy jutsu. That was a funny scene. I was playing the Dodo dance soundtrack from Bleach all throughout "Koroko's" seduction of that sleazeball. And hey, what do you know? I'm really not bothered by him anymore. I'll confess, when I first started this, I honestly thought Konohamaru's presence alone would lessen my enjoyment and decrease the chapter's ratings as a consequence, but now? I'm cool with him. You've done a great job fleshing him out that I've got a solid grasp on who he is without feeling irritated by him any longer.

Ah, the old cliché of a kid trapped in a burning house. It never gets old. It perfectly sets the vibe of who character A rushing in to rescue character B is, whether the actions of heroism is a façade or not. Something's telling me this Doc-character's act of heroism was to fool Ichigo and the gang into thinking he's trustworthy, but that could just be me looking too much into it. Either-way, I'm exciting to see/read how this latest arc pans out.

Oh, don't think I forgot. I was saving it for last. Hinata and Ichigo kissed!~ I adored their moment of teenage lust so much! I was practically squealing like a fangirl when Hinata "tripped" and mesmerized Ichigo with a longing stare. I loved the build-up to the kiss too, with Ichigo admiring Hinata's tenacity and Hinata enjoying Ichigo's touch on her head. It was beautiful!~ Moegi's little warning was just the icing on the cake. Her and Hinata have been through a lot together and it shows through her dialogue. The punchline of her finding Ichigo's and Hinata's romance romantic was expertly delivered too.

11 out of 10, if such a thing exists. You've risen my expectations to the heavens and beyond now!~