I actually like the Spider-Man kissing MJ. This is a great chapter and I get to read a small part of Gwen & Felicia. Ah, Can't wait to read what happen next.

Great chapter! Although I felt it was kinda rushed because it was bouncing around a lot, but I still enjoyed the chapter. What kinda got me confused was why Peter wasn't in costume when he was looking for Uncle Ben's killer, but other than those minor issues, I'm really looking forward for the next chapter and can't wait to see how the story goes!

1. Pacing - it's good! I like how you kept Peter from discovering all aspects of his power in one scene. Leaving the wall-crawling for the end was a good move, on your part.

2. Variety of characters - I love that you've included a collection of students at Midtown. While it's understandable why the movies limited it to MJ, Gwen, Harry, and Flash, adding more to the mix makes it feel more like the high school environment. Man, I just love that I can really get a grasp on what Midtown High is like with all these students in it. I read a lot of YA so maybe that's why I like it so much. Plus, I think Spider-Man has a lot to do with youth/coming-of-age so establishing that there's more young people around him emphasizes the overarching theme.

3. Hobie - He's a really great guy, I like how you're writing him. :) And adoptive brother to Harry? Neat concept!

Woah, another great chapter MGZ! :D
I like the way you introduced Gwen to the story, and I liked the interaction with Peter and Flash. :)

Extremely well written and I can't wait for more! :D

*sees Gwen* *infarts*

I enjoyed like a LOT how you portrayed really coldly the Man in the Shadows :D

Nothing much to say really,as always you pretty much nail every single character,the villains too,I can see why you said that it would be very darker,Norman is a dick XD

Gwen...oh Gwen...you're the best,Gwen. :3

Really liked her introduction.

Sorry for the short review,I'm kinda sleepy right now but again...great work!

I can not wait for the next chapter in this story it is amazing how well you have managed to write this story.

Dude, this is really awesome! :D
I like how you've meshed together different aspects of the different Spidey-verses, and I especially loved the Mustard line.

Can't wait for chapter 2! :)

This is awesome so far. :) Re. your writing style, your sentences are nice and even. I admire that because I naturally write long sentences with lots of commas and clauses!

Two words for ya... AWESOME WORK... It was amazing to read this.. When I first saw the whole page I was like thinking that this guy has written a chapter from history...But When I started reading it.. If felt cool and cool and Amazing! Awesome take on characters... Awesome work ! Gonna read the next chapters... Awesome work metal!

I really really enjoyed this chapter! I though the pacing was good and it got me really hooked. Though, I kinda wish you could had interpreted Uncle Ben's death differently, but that's fine. An inclusion of Flash reacting to Uncle Ben's death would've been cool to read about, but other than those 2 complaints, this chapter was really good!

Another great chapter. I have one suggestion though. That thing where you showed the murder of Uncle Ben before showing Peter letting him go, that was good, but I think you should've saved that scene until the part where he sees the police poster. Instead of making us read it twice, you could've put the entire scene there in italics.

In Parts.

Your take on this new Peter Parker and his friends is great,it's a more nerdy and geek adaptation of the character,I can see how he uses the actual technology to help him,and the mentions of those fantastic games is a bonus point.

The creation of the costume was such a good time, I was smiling the entire time,really cool how you described his effort,and no,it wasn't rushed,everything was running smoothly.

Uncle Ben and Aunt May scenes were great lime the rest of the chapter,not much to tell about them besides that I liked how you wrote them,and that scene where Peter rejects Uncle Ben..damn..

Flash totally deserved that, but deserving doesn't mean that it should happen and you captured well that.

This was the best version that I ever read here,very solid and believable, amazing work.

That last fight scene was really cool,you certainly knows how to write scenes like that, great work again.

So that's it,sorry if I missed some aspects, I highlighted the ones that I felt it was more important.

See ya!

You definitely polished stuff from the past chapter,you're taking your time now and I like the whole school time that you're going for,many fanfics don't use that time but your take is being incrible,again the characters are so very well written,Flash,Harry,Liz are the ones that I liked most besides Peter of course :) Nice take with Harry brother, that's fresh.

Anyway,I enjoyed reading and I'm looking forward to the future adventures you are gonna write.

See ya!

This first chapter was amazing, you're doing your own take but you captured the essence of the characters so well! That Uncle Ben scene...right in the feels ..

Anyway,going to read the next chapter!

This chapter is much better with Peter interacting with his classmates. Im not a good critic, since I cant really write but if Im pressure to. so my reviews would just be if ''i like it or not, if the dialogue was good, and if i feel your enthusiasm in your writing'' . With that, great work and keep it up