I think of a Witch that can suck all people's despair and misery to make its dark magic stronger.

A Witch will be lure if it sense a person who has a powerful negative emotions and it will capture that person to be its host in order to draining all of those negative from that person.

The Witch can see the memories in the victim's mind - it will lock those happy memories of the victim and replace happy memories into bad memories in order to increase the victim's despair and misery. The victim acts like a core power for the Witch to become stronger and stronger as it will easily defeat any Magical Children.

The Witch can even materialize beings into the reality that based off the victim's memories. It can also create a copy of the victim as a spy to spy on the Magical Children. The victim's copy is like a slight of darker version - slight pale skin and the eyes were lifeless.

It can also mimic the victim's voice to mock and play to tormenting the victim's friends over and over again. Repeating words about bad things they did on the victim and they never meant to happen.

In how to stop the Witch is to free the victim from the Witch's core. One of thw victim's friends will save the victim and confessed his or her thoughts and feelings about the victim. Once the victim accepted the apology both of them escape together, causing the Witch to loss its dark magic as it no longer has its host.

This Witch's name is Dracama, the Consume Witch.

You will add Iris' Magical Girl Counterpart, right? But her Japanese name is also Iris. So, I don't mind to name her counterpart as Amytis, it is a similar name of a gemstone of Amethyst as they both have purple hair.

I can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

WIIIITTTCCCCHHH

Alright, just to be clear, I haven't been on this website since i think late 2013-early 2014 and I'm back now. This was a story that caught my interest a few years back and I never actually was able to read it until now. So here's your review.

You do in fact have a way with words, I can give you that. You have this poetic style in your descriptions and it really flows well, especially with the haunting labyrinths and mythical stuff of the story. I see this in the fight scenes and the witch fight and during Satoshi's magical boy fight (the "change" sequence, that was really well written). I think you should be very proud of yourself about that. You have mastered words very powerfully and you know how to implement them. Everything is raw emotions and I enjoy it. You spend enough time describing both external and internal interactions and that is a key point of storytelling. You have it under control and it makes the ride worthwhile and fun. You also have managed to scoop up all these characters and put them in your universe and leave them virtually untarnished. What I mean is, nobody is out of character. Everyone is acting as they would in a regular Pokemon episode and that's really good. I find many stories that try to make characters act they way they want to in order to "make their story better", however in most cases it doesn't; rather, it makes someone else's characters theirs and that's not how you write fanfiction, to be literal about it. Everyone is acting in place and you got a chuckle out of me during Iris and Ash's little spats, or Cilan's speaking pattern. It was very fun to read.

There are two things that I want to address, however. There was little to no need to keep the episode chapters. This story very well could have existed with some other characters without including it. Maybe you could have shifted it to take place afterwards at the beginning. Already, you have many hoops and hurdles for a reader to get through before they even get to understand the premise and what's going on, and as much as I love build-up there was too much. I skimmed through many chunks because I wanted to scrounge up more plot which didn't even get uncovered until around Chapter 9. If you're planning to keep your storyline in the dark until Chapter 9, you need to throw bones along the way to keep your audience interested. Making them wait for any kind of revelation or discovery for that long risks your readers losing interest. I suggest that in the future, you keep in mind that you need to pull your readers along with content that is brand new to them, and the episode-linked chapters dulled the story by forcing your readers through content they already knew. It would have also made your job as the writer much easier, and you would have had more flexibility with the characters and how many there are in a scene. The N episodes have so many characters on deck at a time and if you're attempting to write a story that needs to have crossover content, there needs to be a good balance between the one area and the next.

I also want to quickly address your entrance of OCs; if they are somehow strongly linked to the plot by being original, by all means ignore me, but maybe Shura should have been Iris or Burgundy's magical girl version? It would have given more to the story, and I feel like since you have this pattern of parallels between Pokemon universe and Madoka universe, it would have been a key feature. I won't touch on Elizabeth because you've only just introduced her, so I'll wait until you update.

Don't feel discouraged by my criticism, I tend to review that way. I really cannot wait until you update again so I can see what other magic will come from your typing fingers. Until then, I shall await your update. Don't be afraid to message me if you have any questions! Have a wonderful day!

-Wolfie

I'm interested in this Elizabeth's importance to the plot, but there's something wrong with this chapter: Professor Juniper is a girl.

I really love fanfics and all,but could you also continue with some that you didn't touch for a long time. There are still people who have hopes that you will be soon updating stories like "Finding Fallen Stars" and such. I would be really grateful if you would reply or even update some of these stories.
Thanks for reading...
-Bakura

Update!

This chap was really cool! 5 magical children! Whoo!

Welcome back to the story.

Please hurry up and update! I've been waiting for like 17 days! (I know, soooooo long) I really want more so don't discontinue!

*sigh* as much as I hate cliffhangers, I'm actually rather satisfied with this one. Surprised? So am I. In any case, well done with the explainations. I was honestly worried about how you were gonna tackle them.

Please hurry up and update. I really LOVE this fanfic and I want more! This really got me hooked. Thank you for writing this and PLEASE CONTINUE. I'm practically begging!

Oh Kyubey, you pick the worst possible times, and the best possible times to make an appearance.

And yay! That was definitely fast enough for me! Great chapter, loved the Witch battle!

DUN DUN DUNNNNNNNN!

What is Satoshi's magic - usually a Magical Girl's magic/power is based on their wish. Also, what's Satoshi's emblem?

...I can't wait for the next chapter. I'm hooked. :3