This is a very well written story, and truly deserves an 18 rating. I think this is as far as I can go, because things are getting dark real fast.

You Really got the dynamics down!

I get the feeling Jeff's gonna be in this somehow, what with the smile theme.

I really like your recaps.
I wonder if your planning sister stories with the dog n' drag?

I am married to this idea.
We will have ugly children.
Yes, that is a valid compliment.

I like it how you shows - in such a realistic form - how people would behave if such villigantes indeed strolled through the streets of a big city and how it would affect common citizens. It's somethig that really happens in fics like that - that we can see the regular citizens' perspective.

I liked this chapter for the fact that Cindy appeared - even if just in the form of a fleeting memory and not as a living girl any more, unfortunately - but it's nice to have someone that unique for a change - even if this uniqueness is just a mere result of one's illness.

I enjoyed the description of how scared he was and how he saw the Slenderman - what such an entity looks like in the eyes of a human being - I generally like the brutality of your stories - and the fact that there is no romance indeed in it - as you told me that you don't do romance and detest any sort of shipping XD That's good :)

This chapter was way shorter than the previous ones - but then again; maybe it's better for when there is a shorter chapter, you can concentrate on it better - on what it is about. Btw , I liked Cindy - disabled people are rarely characters in fics - and I was happy to read the tormentors were punished :) I don't like it when someone is a bully and I'm happy like this proverbial pig in the mud when a tormentor of someone is punished - but not with death - then they would have a lot of time to think over what they were doing to innocents :) Like you know, lying in hospital or from the perspective of a wheelchair :)

I was happy to read Saldivar lost his miserable life :) I like reading sadistic descriptions of people's deaths - I just instantly put in the position of those evil folks those people I don't like and I feel they would be better when dead :) I like such a type of sadistic taunting, this sort of we could say, playing of one with their victim - like when they think they will win, that they will come alive out of their opression and here it turns out that no, their time on Earth has come to its end :) You are a very good writer indeed - reading your stories is like reading a real novel - something that is rarely found in fics - people, including myself, very rarely write here novel-like fics (novel-like when it comes to their quality and their length as well) and I do appreciate this. Hey, you know what? Is there any way you could take an attempt to publish this as a real novel? I mean, it's enough to change some stuff, some details and you could publish it as something really original. After all, some people did publish their books from the world of a fandom - like, I don't know, maybe books from the world of The Predator, Terminator etc. What do you think?

Another portion of gore and brutality :) The fight scenes you describe are so rough, written in quite a simple language, yet showing so much - but then again, something went wrong here so the readers can't read it well - we want to read the scenes of the fight not all that mentions on font size and the like that sneaked into the text, lol. This is the last chapter of this story I read, yet I hated this error - it made the chapter difficult to read.

I just started to read your wonderful story on Slenderman and all I can say is that it's one of the best stories I ever read here, on . It's so long and complicated, you take care of details - you certainly do have a talent for graphic descriptions. So far I read three chapters and I'm going to read more when I have more time.

Looking really good, especially in terms of building on your existing plot threads while also picking up on some dangling ones. What I especially like about your stories, especially in Slender Man specifically, is your skill at keeping all of these balls in the air at once.

Looking forward to more!

I like it, but I don't really like the police bashing. Police officers can't teleport, or read minds. They can't bag everyone. Also, our prison systems work on reform, not punishment.

Wait a second... Y U NO UPDATE?!