The other issue is that he keeps on mentioning people fucking with his domain like when he says it to Oceanus and yet he is somehow restricted by balance at the same time in how he can respond but you don’t explain why? It is all just not explained. If his domain is being fucked up then by the logic you applied to his fight with the a Titan of Distruction he should be allowed to instantly retaliate? You pick and choose when you enforce the rules you have created for the story. You have to be consistent and right now you just arnt.

The whole balance thing doesnt make sense. This isn’t balanced as they are at a disadvantage which makes it inheritnyl unbalanced. You are simply putting them at a disadvantage to cause drama and tension for the story. It doesn’t work though because we know he will win in the end.

Silver sea sees your heart and bound your foes in the gold sea and I am a demon a demon if u feel my heat look into my soal it's where my demon hides it is where he hides

Heavy need of a proofreading and a beta. This story is proof that word amount doesn't equal quality.

This story is just amazing, but do you think you will finished it one day?

And it's so great.

Nice story, but it better be finished cuz I don't wanna deal with another unfinished story.

I absolutely loved this whole span on your au take on the first Titan war. I found it fascinating and very creative. Great job.

There are a lot of misspellings.

It's like half your keyboard is missing at one moment, then the other half disappears a few seconds later.

The flow of information sucks too. People know things they shouldn't know, then seem to forget about said information immediately after.

Percy is the embodiment of ambiguity of power. His morals also don't make sense.

I like the plot, but the way it's written kinda blows.

You need a beta, my dude.

I have always questioned that line.

I have always questioned that line.

Why did zesu think he was the twins father and why did posiddon and hera put up with Zeus all this time?
Nice to see some differences from cannon.
Really this dumbass split the council in the middle of a war and why didn't Athena five the warning before the split.
I'm dissappinted Percy didn't say at to Alex about what he noticed about annabeth

The council the twins being Percy siblings came as a surpt along with the fact that he's a Zoe and zeus were both annoying.
Percy exposing apollo cause he ignorwd him was ridiculous and make some wonder why Percy knows so many secrets yet was basically unknown.
Surprised he could kill the monsters and save zoe