Good story.

So Hinata had 2 preliminary fights?

Love how you made Sasuke fantasizing beating Itachi lol

Amazing story. Please keep updates coming. :)

Well done Naruto and hinata beating that duckass uchiha .

Poor sakura she didn't deserved that and Naruto and hinata beat the living daylights out of Sasuke.

yes,SAKURA GETTING BASHED

Was the song in chapter 16 an edited version of “Let it go” from frozen?

Ok, where the heck are you getting all the quotes at the start from ?

It's a bit confusing how he is about to embark on a mission and there's all this build up and then suddenly. He's back and kicking himself over sasuke getting injured. There wasn't even a summary of the mission. No just a instant time skip without indicators. It's like reading a prologue and then the final page of a book..

Love the story please keep them coming !

Freaking love you story! I'm so glad that you updated! It's seems things have been hard for you but I'm just glad you haven't quit your story! I look forward to the next chapter!

really love this story cant wait for new chapters

You just created a Frozen-style song about Naruto's Scorch Release. Nicely done

You started your story with mob chasing him... Really? WHY!? Please, for the love of god, if you care about the quality of this story, how reflects on you as a writer, or having people enjoy reading it then I beg of you to rewrite this chapter and remove the mob chasing him. Please. The "mob chases and beats him on his birthday" cliche is just so bad. So please, please, PLEASE rewrite this chapter to remove it.

You can change it to anything else. Maybe an enemy shinobi specialized in infiltration and espionage found out he was a jinchuuriki and tried to assassinate him. Or maybe he's out late in a park and one person with a grudge starts beating him, something that hasn't happened before. Or maybe he's wandering through the forest and gets attacked by a bear. Or he gets in a fight with someone, the fight escalates too far (as fights involving a kid tend to do), and he nearly dies, then badly injures the person instead of killing them (or he could still kill them for extra drama). And it doesn't necessarily need to happen on his birthday; in fact, better that it isn't so that you can get as far away as possible from the terrible cliche of "a mob chases and beats him every year on his birthday". Hiruzen being the one to rescue him is fine, but it could be anyone. It could be an ANBU, or a Konoha military police officer, or a normal shinobi, and they could be a random person rather than a character of any importance.

I know for a fact that there are a lot of people who will immediately stop reading a story at first sight of anything resembling a mob chasing Naruto, because it tends to be an indicator that a story will suck. That isn't necessarily true of this story (though I need to read more than one chapter to make a judgement), and there have been stories with mob chases that were good, but more often than not a mob scene in the first chapter is the first indication that a story will have bad writing and storytelling, and will have more bad cliches.

If you don't understand why the "mob chase" is so bad, or what the problems with it are, then I will gladly help out by explaining it. The fewer people who use it, and the more who understand why it's so bad, the better. Plus I like helping fanfic writers improve, and this is a clear and easy way to do so. I'd also be happy to help you rewrite this chapter if you'd like. Heck, if it means removing just one mob chase from the archives of Naruto fanfics then I'd be willing to do it myself for your use.

I'd like to hear back form you, so please send me a PM if you read this in reply.

Thanks and regards,
Walk The Max Planck