wait youve watched 3rd rate tamil movies?

thank you for not writing everything cannon over and over again, it gets old fast

While I’m loving the book so far, there are a couple things that are annoying me a bit.
I’m not a fan of how much there is of Percy’s view when the book is about Iris, and I’m constantly getting confused with the random point of view changes. Please don’t take this as flaming your story as that’s not what I intended. I’m just simply trying to state my opinion and implying some things that could make the story better or easier to understand what’s going on. I’m very sorry if this offends anybody. I don’t mean for it to.

hell hath no fury like a woman scorned

if she kept her memories, why didn't she get them to leave?

wait, I see. I'm an idiot.

actually annabeth is the councilor of athena cabin.

saying that she is the blood of Leto as well as specifying that the godly parent is male, combined with the monster she ran into before the minotaur makes it all but spelled out who her father is.

You keep switching back and forth between third and first person in a single chapter or even paragraph and it is extremely jarring. Plus without warning it swaps between Percy and Iris. This is an interesting story but it needs extensive editing.

Fantastic. Bumpy start, but this quickly turned around into a wonderful story. Thanks so much. I'm on to the next!

It's very confusing figuring out your random changes in POV. Way too many POVs being told with no indication of switching at all.

great story

Patrolling the Mojave almost makes you wish for a nuclear winter.

I'm just gonna call it quits on this story...
The first time i read a Percy fan-fic i thought it was pretty good, but this story is just confirming to me that both stories are on the verge of outright plagiarism. I mean both these stories are damn near identical with the only difference being fem-Harry's abilities. You obviously don't know that when you write a fan fiction you're not supposed to follow the story so closely. Hell it's best if the canon characters arn't in the story at all! Use the story conceipts, play in the same word.. but avoid the main plotline if possible.

How was iris born if Artie's is a maiden goddess