*Waves* I have played skyrim...But more recognizing things by instict..(wonder if being a dork is hereditary...) And yha he seemed OOC but it's soon much fun to visualize. :) Fingers still hurt from the first review so just going to point out things are still moving crazy quick here and perhaps drawing out a few scenes could be and idea to add to my first few.

But I do really like this. Waiting for an update now :D

Wow... Sure wasn't expecting that... In a good way haha like the change in perspective. :D

Yes RPG themed AU kinda thing! Haha, I like the idea but a few things I'd like the to point out. And these are just my opinion so don't take them the wrong way at all, just *flails hands to acsent point* this Site is to get feed back so I'm giving my all to try and help. Also pardon my spelling spell check broke.

First off, I agree with the fact Muhyo adapting to the world faster than Roji to something like this but still think it was a little quick. Like they should of struggled a little more with stuff like fighting or heck even trying to get the armor on! (Although that would of ended up silly...just imagen them arguing what way and how armor went on.)
Secondly, Although I do see Roji being more a healing and misdirection skilled person with the spells, I see him being better at melee fighting then Muhyo since he's the one use to running around fighting rather than a range based fighter like Muhyo.

Finally I'm guessing you're still a newer writer? I DON'T MEEN THIS IN A RUDE WAY AT ALL but your writing dose show a lesser digree of practice. By this I mean vocabulary and the flow of the scenes. I by no means am a pro in the sense, far from it I'm still learning like crazy. (Thank heavens for great Betas and talented friends willing to help) But I suggest perhaps trying to add more description but in a roundabout way...like dicribe the sroundings more but not like "there was this blah blah blah and..." But kinda like "It was hard to see with so little light streaming thought the thick canopy..." or something like that...
Gha I suck at explaining stuff DX sorry if that didn't really work but I tried. Best to look up titorials, some are actuly really good. :)

Now off to read the next chapter! *skips off with a friendly wave*

Please keep writing! It's so great!
Poor roji all he can do is heal and muhyos
Not making roji feel any better either
Ohhhhh but I love this story 3!